This was a very fantastic story and I can't wait until you write more of it. Please do!!
Just for an idea, you should try to write the story as a story not a script.

awww crap...I wanted to be the firstest to review but I couldn't find it! I thought it was crossdresser on THE moon...oh well...I'm your first friend to review ^-^.*proud*I'm the best! kinda! and don't update like carly. If you updated like carly...well....you would never update ^^;;...anyways, I'm running out of room...so...*glomps*baibai ^-^.

^^ I like it, i think its Hillarious! continue it soon, k?

Ha! that was funny, please keep writing