Interesting one shot. Extending it would probably be difficult, since I'm not sure Megumi could stand to be involved with Ranma full time, due to the chaos in his life...

Wow, that was good, I mean really good. Usually OC's have a habit of comming off as a little cliche when they have a major role, but your's was perfect.

WOW, great story. I always like these kind of stories where Ranma is in trouble and meets someone new who will help him overcome his problems. I really hope you'll continue writing this one.

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Nicely done. I'd like to read the rest of the story when you write it.

This is ausome. I absolutly loove the Ranma-Is-A-Girl fics.

I like the story a lot, just pointing out a word usage pet peeve of mine.

Wraith: a ghost, or just someone thin, gaunt, or pale.
Wrath: anger, rage, fury, revenge--one of the deadly sins.

You used the former when you wanted the latter.

This is a really good story, but does it really need to be continued? I mean, I know things aren't 100% resolved, but this feels like a decent oneshot, to me. If you do add more to this, please be quite certain that you will finish it.

Not a bad start, even though you use the cliche 'saved from a rape gang' introduction. Placing this story in the middle of the Herb storyline is quite an interesting idea, with some good opportunities for writting.

One thing that really strikes me though; you label says it's a romance. If Ranma and Megumi have a bit of a fling here it can't possibly last, and that will (in a good way) add quite a bit more emotional subtext to Ranma's eventual return to Akane.

I look forward to seeing more of this!

Very nice. Shame it stops just as it starts getting going. I hope to see more of this. Why isn't it on your geocities page tho?

hmm...pretty good story, but the nasty thugs in alley is a bit overused but no problem ;)

i wonder if ranma is going to show her the curse...and i wonder if she thinks differently of ranma...

Nice start to a good functional relationship. I do wonder though, are Ryoga and Mousse doing anything to make money? Or could the fact that they have such crippling defects that they would be worthless in any job that while Ranma works the two of them train so that when they get the chance they could turn on Ranma and best him, leaving Ranma trapped as a female forever.

Defenintly want to see how the relationship developes.

An excellent beginning, and definitely not rushing into anything.

I *was* beginning to wonder if you'd forgotten about this idea. Glad to see you hadn't.

Megumi seems like an interesting character, interested in trying new experiences, without actually attempting to rebel against anything. Open-minded and outgoing, without being overbearing, someone who could possibly help Ranma a great deal.

I'm also happy to see that you don't seem to intend to turn this into a lemon, as many on Delphi seemed to think was the intention, clearly misunderstanding the *romantic* aspect of the original post.

In any case, I look forward to reading more. Keep up the excellent work.

I have to echo my appreciation here. This is a nice and tender work; the fight scene was appropriately quick and muted, and the view of Ranma through Megumi's eyes makes for a chance to subtly reshape the reader's impressions of our favorite aquatranssexual.

My one quibble is that "canonical" Ranma doesn't display much sensitivity, which this Ranma seems to have in spades.