I liked the ending. Not because I hate Alma (which I do, heroine my ass), but because I really didn't see it coming and it's a nice change for a tragic ending as opposed to the crappy tragic ending from the game. And Agrias cried a little too much. Too weepy. But props for the unexpected Alma dying.

wow. That was just...wow. You have a great talent for writing. This story amazed me. Well done.

Its an okay story... but your writing needs work. The plot is all right, and seeing as its Agrias/Ramza... those are more points. I just wish there was more of Agrias' thoughts.

The story was also pretty hard to believe at times.