Hey, I remember reading this story ages ago and now I've found it again, so I've had a look at said story again. Great plot, amazing dialogue and a great deal of contrasting characters. I liked the backstory for both Miguel and Catalina - it' a shame that Kevin had to die, but I think he actually had it coming. He betrayed Vercetti's trust and sabotaged his entire operation, so it only seems fair that he dies by the sword. It even provides some new depth to Miguel's character. Great story, man.

Also, if you're not too busy, can you have a look at my new story? This is the link:

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Nice Story! Kinda feels like a movie.

Great story, what amazed me is that it was very descriptive AND had alot of action, the two usually don't mix because people rush one or the other. There wasn't anything wrong with it that I could see, each character had their own personality and their own motives for doing what they did. 9.5/10, great story.

What can I say man? This story was great! The plot was awesome, and I liked the way you explained how Catalina, Miguel, and Kevin got together, and how Kevin became so... Quiet, and cold. The way you describe action scenes and people is great, and I liked all of your original characters.

Job well done, and congratulations on actually finishing a story!

Oh, and to NinjaPirateCowboy, no he was not at the rumble to kill Vercetti, he was there for tea and cucumber sandwiches.

Really, you're suppose to use common sense when a bunch of gangsters boat to a crimelord's mansion and start shooting at him, his house, and his guards... Is it so hard to figure out what he's there to do?

cool fic...why is every one killing tommy?

but like the way you killd him

great story

wicked story... u killed tommy

Very nice, but I'm starting to wonder if this battle scene's ever gonna end!

I hope you update a little more often so we can find out the ending...

Keep it up.

AWESOME. AWESOME. AWESOME. AWESOME! this story is brilliant, but i wonder who wins...i hope tommy does, but i'll wait and see. keep it up!

i just love your story it rocks my socks ! ;]

Gr8 story m8 im sorry i didn't put the review at the final chapter its just that its a long story and i shall read the rest tomorrow or tonight if i have time. still a fantastic 4 chapters

You're a brilliant writer who belongs with the very best at fanfciton. Keep writing! Your skill is undeniable. P.S. What's up with that Ninja something guy? Have you read his story? It's practically porn! What a sick bastard!

Poor Cameron. The world does have it in for him. Great writing and nice plot. Looking forward to the rest of your fic.

I'm sorry I had to say more, You apperently don't speak english as a first language. Your Placing and pace are just retarded. Why would a ganglord bring his girlfriend to a rumble? Why would a ganglord be boating to a rumble? Is he there to kill vercetti or what? A brass knuckle punch to a jaw what not just produce bloody spit, it would produce pain, unconciousness, Death even. You can't shrug off a brass knuckle punch. YOu are a shitty writer, go do something else. Theres way to much shit to call you on. Whens the last time you saw sunlight? And you don't get Mist from a cigar, smacktard. You get smoke! YOU REALLY SUCK! ARGAH!