Your spelling is good. I'm not sure about the plot, because your cram-everything-into-one-paragraph format makes it hard to grasp everything, but it isn't a bad idea.

If all the Chp (number) things were meant to be chapters, then you really have to work on dividing chapters. Every time someone new starts talking, you're supposed to hit the enter key. It prevents giant one or two paragraph chapters, which are an eyesore and just feel more rushed.

If you're a Hannibal/Amy shipper, that's fine. You just need to keep them both in character when you write them. Right now they're both a bit too soppy, and since when is Murdock Hannibal's psychiatrist? I don't see PG-13 violence, but that's because you barely describe anything here.

A little editing, and this could be a nice story.

While the concept and story were fairly good, the layout really detracts from the potential power if the story. A little more depth would help to make the plot well grounded. Overall, I give it a B.

Great Story!

Great story! This is one of the best fan fics featuring Amy that I have ever read. I'm a fan of Murdock/Amy and Face/Amy fics, but I had never really thought about Amy/Hannibal-until now! They would have made SUCH a perfect match! Too bad Melinda and George had their differences... that would have been a great storyline! Keep up the awesome writing!

Carolyn

Hey exelent work GeGe! I always thought Amy has feelings for the Colonel. Your story was just right. I guess you handled the charakters very good.

You show the soft side of Hannibal without letting him loose authority!

Cute ending. I've always loved that song, BTW. I hope you keep writing and that we see more from you soon.

Oh my gosh! This is so great! I love this! Finally, someone who agrees with me about these two! :)

Okay - it works. A little more attention to the grammatical (ex. two for to? run ons?) Nit-picking, I know, but it does distract some of us. Overall above average but needs more fleshing out.

that was a sweet story. who would've ever thought of putting amy and hannibal together? keep writing. it was good.

Ooohhh! Thank you for putting Hannibal and Amy together. Very nicely done. And the Bob Seger song was a nice touch too. Good job!