Beautiful writing. Good story.

I don't know if you're even around this fandom anymore, I just want to ask you to keep writing. You're awesome.

Ack. I always forget things when I review. "and if you don't like, then don't read!" You forgot the word "it". "don't like don't read" is such an irritation. It's not that hard to say "If you don't like it please refrain from reading this." It just sounds so much better and makes me want to respect the author, not outright ignore a potentially good story because of a poor choice of words.

"If anything else, those chains should come in handy in bed.

Where in hell did that thought come from?!"

Where the hell indeed. It just doesn't fit, at all. If you took the whole bit out I think the chapter would have ended on a better note. Also, age. During the slaughter of Kurapika's village. children were killed in front of their parents just to get the needed reaction. Killua is a pro killer. Even that pretty younger brother of Killua's was seen with the Troupe. Sooo, why is Kuroro soooo shocked about age? I know this is old, but if I see something I deem worth mentioning, I'm gonna say it. And that needed mentioning.

Never enough rabid-ness... I swear, I'm going to start reading this to my sister in three days, and if you haven't updated by the time she gets to #23, you're going to be in biiig trouble.

Have a catface... $(((((({8;

great :)

Please, please, please put up something. Anything with decent grammar and plot will do at this point. I have nothing else to rely on and you picked the worst time to get a writer's block that doesn't seem to end.

I knew this would end in heartbreak when I seen this hadn't been updated for close to 6 years now and I still decided to red it, but I still feel the need to review.

You had real talent and I wish you would have continued.

What happened to this? It's been five years :( I hope to see it continued sometime in the future, it's honestly one of the best Hunter X Hunter fanfics I've ever read. Scrap that, it's one of the best fanfics from ANY fandom I've ever read. You definately have the potential to become a published author, the way you've developed the characters, plot, everything and still managed to keep it accurate to the canon is beautiful, I'm in love :')
I hope to see this continue, I'm hooked and have literally been up reading this all night! Tell me when you get your work published, you can definately do it if you want, And I'd definately read it if I can! .

This chapter was absolutely hilarious to me, but yet still coated with extreme realism and tension to emphasize Kurapika's unfavorable situation. Characterizations have been spot on so far and your narration is just superb! It's like a dream-come-true, this story is. I love it to pieces.

The very beginning, in which Nobunaga reflected on Ubo made my smile. The only thing about that part I caught was Nobu regretting not tagging along with Ubo to fight Kurapika alongside him. One of the reasons Kurapika chose to kill Ubo first was because the man preferred to fight alone. That was why he took the Shadow Beasts on by himself and left the Ryodan when the pursued Kurapika.

Nevertheless, the Geneiryodan are impressive villains because of the fact that they're like a little family; they're still human. Sure, the Spiders are a cold, murderer-family, almost just like the Zoldyeck, maybe. I'm not sure about this one, considering I've really only specifically paid attention to Kurapika's role in the series, not Gon's, Leorio's or even Killua's.

In speaking of that trio, I very much enjoyed their appearances in the previous chapters as well. Being the Kurapika obsessed girl that I am, scenes with Gon, Killua and/or Leorio alone I usually skim, but your story had me intrigued with all three of them (four, including Melody. I've always loved her, though) and reinvigorated them for me. You express emotion very well (clap, clap!). I often find myself tripping over scenes like that.

Back to this chapter, I during the ENTIRE beginning bit of Kurapika's observations with the spider, I was singing in my head the 'Itsy Bitsy Spider', and mentally laughed when Kurapika made a connection from the scene with the exact same nursery rhyme. I was thinking to myself, wondering if you even knew the allusion you were making with the spider and the drain and whatnot. You did, and it amused me so.

Some of the best lines in this chapter:

HISOKA: "Ne, Dancho, can I fight him?"

KURAPIKA *thinking*: "Oh, hell no."

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"And his nen… Kurapika didn't need gyou for confirmation. Hisoka's aura was flaring, pulsing wildly – and most of the fluctuations were centered around the other man's groin.

Kurapika seriously considered screaming, "Get the hell away from me!" and running out into the street, Judgment Chain and conditions be damned. "

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Sneaky, manipulative bastard.

Kurapika wouldn't put it past Kuroro Lucifer to test his abilities by pitting him against an opponent he loathed to face. He made a mental note to give "the dancho" holy hell – as far as the Judgment Chain allowed him to – the next time they were partnered for another mansion-raiding mission.

And Kuroro was still smirking.

Sneaky, manipulative, good-looking basta–

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Excellent work!

I really like this story! Update soon :)

'Leorio's grip on the steering wheel tightened momentarily when he thought of how ridiculously mundane and boring these people's lives must be compared to theirs'

Story of My life TTuTT

I am really excited to see what shall happen, and I think its better if you leave the Genei ryodan members abit touchy at first. Its only natural to be untrustworthy of someone who use to hunt you down and killed ur comrade xD

(Australia owo)

I love how u included Fei tan as a main aggressor. i love his personality to torture people, its quite amusing xD But i did realise something, Kurapika already had a nen chain on his heart so did Kuroro forget about that?... Oh well, its an awesome story! This has got to be one of my favourite Fan fictions yet!

(Also I realised that some of the chapter names kinda sound like Linkin Park songs, Is their a connection? - Over obsessive fan-girlism

Wow, you're an amazing writer 0.0

Update please the story is so good so continue it . Don't drop it at the best of it . Please I support you to write the next chapter of WH

More than four years that you stopped updating this fanfiction (except if I did not see a continution in an other place) and I just found it... Such a waste if there's not other capter, because it's without any doubt one of the best I've ever read ! Your way of writing is excellent, the idea is great, almost everything has its importance...

I think I like reading fics like these the most. And Kurapika entering the geneiryodan is such a good idea that I now thinks the autor should have done it We didn't see our favorite Kuruta in the last arc, it's saddening, but this fanfic is just wonderful !

I hope one day I will have the joy of seeing an update !

And if you wonder, I'm french ! I hope my english is correct !