Reviews for A dream come true?

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The YaoiYuri Hater 2006-04-24 ch 1,	abuseListen, your Japanese needs improvement. You spelled sugoi wrong as well as arigatou. This fic was a little too boring, even for a one shot. Instead of just having Kensuke meet Commander Ikari and crew, have his reactions to others things as well. Like his first time in an entry plug, or maybe prehaps his opinion towards the gaudy plug suits. Just please add some spice too this mundane fiction. 19th Hokage
Jeff Alan 2002-04-04 ch 1,	abuseThis was a good fic. I liked the characterization of Kensuke. He never gets any attention in the fanfic community and it's nice to see a story written about him. And a well written story at that. Oh, but Mad Editor, Lindsey may not have caught your mistake but I did. "Touji, whose chance at pilot had gone so badly." At should be as or you could make the chage to at piloting. While "at pilot" could be correct, there's no way I'm going to buy that you were going for the meaning behind what wording that way would have meant. And just in case you think you can defend this one...you used the word "towards." It should be "toward." Got that from the most recent version of the AP style book. Okay, sorry I just had to point that stuff out because I know grammar's your big thing. Truthfully, your grammar is excellent and so was the story. I look forward to more work from you.
Gabriel11 2002-01-05 ch 1,	abuseFirst, I think that your self-conscious imposition of rules concerning the continuitity of the plot-line is seriously hindering what talent you have for writing fiction. Sometimes you just have to let go of all the "stupid" rules of writing. No true writer pays attention to these, that's what editors are for. The ending should be a bit more clear on the dream aspect or whatever you were trying to convey at that point. Don't forget that the most important part of writing is to speak a message, and maybe you should concentrate harder on that. If you don't think you can do that then maybe you should stick to editing. And segoy is never capitalized in Japanese.
joe doe bell 2001-10-03 ch 1, anon.	abuseThis WAS an interesting idea. And no, it doesn't mean that your not a true fanfic author yet. It just means your not an evil one yet. Give it time.
Ryan T. Nelson 2001-07-07 ch 1,	abuseWhat is wrong with you? You are even more insane than I am, and I have a monopoly on insanity. woah thats heavy.
Gohan Hugger 2001-05-28 ch 1,	abusekensuke's a him? excuse me, kensuke's an IT (A very pleasurful it none the less)
diskincluded 2001-04-15 ch 1,	abuseWell, I never would have seen that one coming in a million years, but now I don't feel like having breakfast myself, in fact, I'm kinda feeling a little squeamish now. I mean, at least most humans don't actually eat whatever it is whilst it's still alive! Still, in his dream he got to do something he always wanted to do (well, sort of anyway), which is get inside an eva again. Now excuse me, I think I'm gonna puke.
me 2001-03-03 ch 1, anon.	abusesugoi not seygo
FierySable 2001-01-02 ch 1,	abuse^_^ Sad! Kensuke was dreaming? sigh poor kid. he's so ready to DIE just to see the EVAs...i wonder why? Mecha-lovers...well, good fic.
Derek Zischke 2000-12-21 ch 1,	abuseOdd...but interesting. Kensuke's a character that just doesn't fit right, as he's really the only one who wants to know anything and have anything to do with the Evangelions, and that gives all sorts of funny little things an author can to do to him. A nice little semi-intropective piece, although I would have liked to have seen Kensuke's thoughts on being eaten (or at least a graphic description...hey, who says the youth of today are desensitised? ^_^).
Yebisu 2000-12-07 ch 1,	abuseI never thought Kensuke had a life period! Well...I'm the only one who ever tried to understand Lillith so one person has to understand this guy?!
Outlaw-Rin 2000-11-24 ch 1,	abuseI think it was the (or only) interesting fic. about Kensuke:) Keep up the good work:)
Worldmage 2000-11-22 ch 1,	abuseSorry, Lindsay, but no he has not. I'm using "Eva" in the Japanese sense... they don't have plural suffixes, so even if the MP series showed up I'd still call them a group of Eva. Besides, "Evas" sounds tacky. Besides, neither 00 nor 02 had a single decent meal in the entire series... so they shared this one ^_^
Lindsay 2000-11-22 ch 1, anon.	abuse"The Eva turned and shambled back to their Cages." I do not understand this. Wasn't there only one Eva in this fic? Oh my gosh...has the English major committed the unspeakable crime of making a grammatical error?
The Dane 2000-11-20 ch 1,	abuseSo...you finaly came outta the bush and went public. ^_~ Nice. No points of criticism. As said 'Keep 'em coming!' And yes, you _are_ a true fanfic author. Don't let anyone tell you differently!

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