I like it! It addresses well the issues with CS Lewis's treatment of Susan, and I was curious whether it was all going to be in her head or not. Interesting how the crazy old man--an adult who got into Narnia, I take it?--was the one trying to pull Susan back to her childhood, and that doing that would lead to her death.

Plus, I love the 1950s New York details.

Yay! Susan was always my favorite character. I remember, as a kid, my opinion of the series plummeted once they dismissed her as a shallow young thing obsessed with lipstick. What a lovely story!

Okay, this story is one of the most out-there Susanfics I've ever read.
It's very confusting dispite being well-written. You have quite an idea here but it falls flat because well, it doesn't make much sense. I don't think you explained the guy from the subway very well and that was confusing to begin with and I don't get the ending either. Sorry, a fine attempt at a Susanfic but certainly not my cup of tea.

huh? I don't get it...
I honestly feel you had a great start on this story but it really could have been much better. But it's very well-written. I will give it that.

well that was creepy...and kind of short...you should have made it longer and explain more.

oh, very well done! (Claps). this was a great first chapter. I can't wait to read the rest.

This... is the most BEAUTIFUL Susan story in existence.

loved it! alan seems cute, though her roomate needs a bit of work...


keep writing!

Well, I've just re-read "The Magician's Nephew." I hadn't picked up that one in several years. I had forgotten that Frank the First King of Narnia had been a London cabbie. I think Aslan has a very high opinion of cab drivers.
So, of course, I remembered this story you wrote and had all sorts of thoughts about it. I incorrectly recalled your cabbie as a Rastafari (which emerged in the 1930's in Jamaica by the way, so is historically plausible.) If Aslan were to incarnate into (or speak through) a human form, what better choice than a cabbie. Throw in that whole "King of Kings, Lord of Lords, Conquering Lion of Judah" title of Haile Selassie I (who is the Rasta messiah) and I think you have a pretty good argument for Aslan the Rasta Cabbie.
Just a thought. Anyway, are you going to finish this story? It stands nicely as it is, it has an innate sense of closure right where it is, with them walking arm in arm away from the reader...happily ever after.

I used to not like Susan, but I've changed my mind. She comes out too well in fanfiction (if not the original work), and you've caught that. The old man, Aslan, Susan, Alan, Florence- every character adds something to this story. What I like most, however, is the logical progression that ends with hope.

I cannot begin to describe how amazing beautiful and perfect this story is. Words would not do it justice.

C.S.Lewis would be proud :)

Interesting.
Although I usually prefer stories where Susan reunites qith her family.
Anyway, it was a good fic.

That was great!

Awesome. Susan's part in the end of the series seemed.. unfinished. But that's perfect fodder for fanfiction, huh?

Great story, I really enjoyed reading it.

I still really love this story. CS Lewis's message was seriously flawed, and it's nice to see Susan's choice of living a full and enjoyble life and of allowing herself to mature into an adult rather than to stay in some kind of magical Peter-Pan-esque kiddie state being portrayed as valid.