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Evie Antorcha 6/8/11 . chapter 2
Yes, continue. It's never too late to continue! O/I is one of my fav pairings!
Hall 4/29/10 . chapter 2
Update, please!
Subb 12/24/09 . chapter 2
are you going to continue this story or not? It's interesting so far but I'd really like for Ororo and Bobby interaction which is lacking.
kendrat199 6/19/08 . chapter 2
Update or else -shakes fist-
Sam 6/12/08 . chapter 2
I think this story has some good potential, however I do have a couple of suggestions. In chapter two Ororo says she knows her feelings for Bobby weren't about to go away anytime soon. Not even two paragraphs later, she says that her infatuation is just a passing phase. I would suggest being careful not to contradict yourself like this. Also, I think a lot of your characters are extremely out-of-character, such as Logan playing cupid, which is your prerogative of course, but I might try to make them slightly more in line with how they might actually behave. Lastly, I think you ought to explore Bobby's side to the story. I think he's being turned into the bad guy, when he's just in love. I think one of the strongest parts of your story was when he was trying to defend his relationship. I am all for an Ororo/Bobby romance, and it would be really interesting to see how it all pans out. Best of luck!
Clever Authoress Name 7/21/06 . chapter 2
Very nicely written! Continue or I will have to find a way to hurt you through the computer! (j/k but...seriously continue...or else.)
anonomous 11/10/03 . chapter 2
This is a really cut idea and I think you should continue with it!
Lynx919 E Coleman 5/31/03 . chapter 2
Please do continue I'll just die of curiosity if you don't finish it!
Dally 5/25/03 . chapter 1
This is great!
Cheryl 5/25/03 . chapter 2
This is worth continuing . I'll be your loyal reader! LOL
Anne 5/9/03 . chapter 2
Please Continue! I love to see how this story ends.
scififreak 1/15/03 . chapter 1
I like this. It has promise. However, there are some things that need to be fixed. First of all, this story is missing many commas. Second, there needs to be more structure (especially with the dialogue and the action), and third, there needs to be more back story, build-up, whatever. Some explanation from Ro about why she loves Bobby would be good and helpful. Oh, along with missing commas there are also misspellings and problems with sentence structure. But, I really did enjoy this.
Loganson 1/12/03 . chapter 1
Bobby/Storm? I like it. It's different and he's just silly enough to lighten her up but without the conflict. Just don't change it to Remy/Storm half way through. Not everyone should be madly in love with Storm. Every man in the group in love the favored female character is unrealistic and comes off as forced. Can't wait to see what the others do - especially Logan.
April 1/11/03 . chapter 1
What a great read. I like how everything is working out. I look forward for more of this story soon.
The Scribe2 1/11/03 . chapter 1
I like this story. I can't wait to see what happens. :)
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