very nicely written. Being an older, protective sister myself, I could really connect with Chocolat's feelings. And it was nice to read your version of the ending dealing with Chocolat, as I was dissapointed with how she comes off as rather petty and selfish in the epilogue of the manga. great job!

Much better than the manga. Chocolat's behavior in that last story was incorrigible.

Aaawww... Mr. Yoshi like it! Me feel so sorry for Chocolate...

It is nice that she is not a sore loser. As Mille said, "They say we all have partners out there, waiting. To each his own and all."

I hope Chocolate finds hers.

Yoooshhi! (Yoshi sniffs)

How cute! Now, I've always had a thing for brotherly relationships, but this is the first great sisterly one that i've seen (no offense to those who wrote others). this was a great fic, and quite accurate, i believe (but what do i know? i've only read manga 1-3 and 8-11). NEway, great job! _

Ooo...first review. Lovely. ::does the happy first reviewer dance::

I like this. It's a rare fic that shows Chocolat in such a positive light like she's shown here. Here, she's just like the Chocolat that I saw in the manga, someone who, despite all her claims on Carrot, loves her sister so much more.

There were some parts that had me confused, like why Mille and Cinnamon were there if this was after all the events in the last battle of Sorcerer Hunters and why the cameraman had a magical camera, again, after the events of the last battle, but all things considered, they weren't that bad.

This is an excellent fic (hurray for a pro-Chocolat fic!) and I hope to read more from you in the future (and was Onion the man that Mille was referring to? I'm dying to know who Mille's guy was...).

Hoeeeeeeee! _V ::Starpiper, cheering for Chocolat::