Reviews for Cracks in the Armor

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Yih 2002-01-04 ch 2,	abuseI love this. I could end right here and that would be enough. But I won't. I can say I relate very well to this, except when I wanted to hold a gun to my head, I couldn't. There's a strange sort of weakness in not committing suicide and in commiting suicide. It's a strange balance of a fragile sort of power. I'm not quite sure how truly you do "win". But Asuka seems to in the end. That I find practicularly different at least in my eyes. Because I've always consider myself a coward for not coming closer to death, like I'm too weak to actually pull the trigger. However, in this case you change my perception at least on Asuka, my view on myself is still the same, you make a sense of belief that she is winning by not killing herself when she believes that by killing herself true rest can finally be attained by happiness? A sense of release... of freedom, which I relate to very well. I didn't reread, I gave you first impression. I'll reread when S.A.D. hasn't overtaken me to the edge. Powerful piece. Good job nii-chan.
joe doe bell 2001-10-03 ch 2, anon.	abuseI liked this but, I didn't feel like I was left hanging for some reason. It might have been better if you would have left off right after Shinji spoke. Two things also. 1) Why is she doing this? Only because she feels guilty for how she treats Shinji? I think she would sooner do it because of her sync ratio. But you mentioned that too. 2) You do remember that Ritsuko said Asuka's period had nothing to do with the drop, that it was something in the subconscience? 3) Rei isn't really that hard to understand when you've seen all that we viewers have seen. But of course, Asuka hasn't seen what we've seen, so I think you did a good job there not forgetting that. I think what you wrote for Shinji was well done, and despite the things I've pointed out here, I think it was a good story, and I will dwell on it. And I am assuming here that you aren't writing anymore right? Cause I wasn't sure. The hole open-ended thing just threw me, because after all, most episodes in a series have a least some openin for continuation.
severed dreams (severeddrea... 2001-07-26 ch 2, anon.	abuseI like the story, it's deep and it's dark. If there was anyone in the eva universe that would be able to analyze these characters so in-depth, it would be Asuka... or maybe Gendou. I don't know anything about psychology yet, but from what you've written, it seem to make sense. I think you've hit it right on the nail with Shinji and Asuka's characterization. Everything seem very believable. The theme of waff/darkfic is cool, too bad it's not more common. In the onslaught of all the new fic, I almost miss this one... I'm glad I didn't, this is good.. very good....
Sad Stephen 2001-07-24 ch 2,	abusealright, you got me; i'm intrigued. eva is full of complex characters, making any character studies derived from it quite interesting, if they are well written. this is the best asuka-study i've seen, and would like to see more. don't worry about the menstruation bit; you're right, it is part of asuka, and i for one am not offended by a guy writing about it. please keep writing. (oh, and i love the title. it's so accurate.) erin :)
Phi Templar 2001-07-21 ch 2,	abusehmm, very depressing but good nonetheless
SangreViento 2001-07-21 ch 2, anon.	abuseGood work, I should say. It's hard to write an extremely dark psychological story like what you did. But, will this story continue to revolve around Asuka's psyche, and disregards all other characters? If that's so, I think it would be rather boring. AFter all, there are heaps of characters in Eva ready to be entered into a story. Nevertheless, amongst a small lot of psyche fics i've read, yours is one of those that don't make me bored. Keep up the good work.
Mageta the Tyrant 2001-07-20 ch 2, anon.	abuseHoody Hoo,what a little cute fic we have here!GO ON!!!
Weltall_elite 2001-07-19 ch 2, anon.	abuseI hate admitting that I'm not smart enough to understand something, because usually I can, but you might have stumped me with this one. The way I see it, the "other girl" is how Asuka describes the knife or gun or whatever it is she's using at the time to kill herself. Like it's a mirror image of herself in a way...or that's the way I see it anyway. In the end, it looks like she decided not to kill herself, therefore, not giving in to the "other girl". What I don't understand is Shinji's role in this and his last line to her. I can't begin to understand what that means. Nor do I completely understand what Asuka's period have to do, specifically, with this. I understand it may alter her mood, and I've heard the idea that it may affect her concentration during synchronization with her Eva, but somehow I think you meant it to mean more than that. Though I'm not quite the brightest person, nor will I pretend to be, as it's still a little confusing, it was very well done. Very thought provoking.
the Cheshire Cat 2001-07-19 ch 1,	abuseReviewing has never been my strong point, yet nonetheless I'm trying to give it a try. As you said, there are many twists and turns as to how this sotry would end eventually. Will Asuka give in to the girl and the gun and pull the trigger? Or would Shinji be able to garner courage and common sense to try and talk her out of this near-catatonic state. Maybe if she was pushed to Misato's room, the sleeping Captain might be roused from sleep and wonder what she was doing with the gun. Then there's another route for the story to turn into. I think the idea of Rei smiling when Shinji bleeds to death spooks me a little. As much as I admire a stoic and near-powerless character, sometimes her actions spook me a little. Masybe I have to go see cloned sheep smile more...
Weltall_elite 2001-07-17 ch 1, anon.	abuseWow. That was intense. I had to let out a sigh of relief when I realized it was only her dream. I wonder if Asuka would really kill herself for these reasons though. Perhaps in the dead of night, when no one's around, she feels some guilt. But I'd hope it wouldn't come to this. Really good story though.
Ryan T. Nelson 2001-07-13 ch 1, anon.	abusethere is one other option to fgurther events in that situation. Let me explain. Shinji was sitting in his room that night thinking about Asuka and his feelings for her. At the time that she flicked off the safety he had finally worked up the guts to go talk to her. So now we have three options. 1)she pulls the trigger. 2)We push he into Misato room to return the gun(meaning she doesn't pull the trigger. or my option option 3) Shinji shows up just as she places the barrel of the gun to her head and from then we have a whole NEW set of options that I am not even gonna go into. I hope that this makes you think. Now to actually review the fic. I though it was very well written it was a pretty good introspective piece on Asukas thoughts. I hope you write the next scene using one of those three options. Or if you want write back to me and I will be more than happy to write it.
Micun 2001-07-05 ch 1, anon.	abuseExcelent story. Personaly, I think that the second chapter shuld start with Shinji thinking he could use a midnight snack. :>>>>> I realy want to know what Shinji would do if he found Asuka like that. Will he react in time to stop her, because every suicider is more likely not to risist it if he/she can be stoped by someone else, not only by themselves. Please continue.
Konran no Tenshi 2001-07-02 ch 1,	abuse... Wow. That was good. sniffle I'm going to have to be jealous now... heh heh. Asuka is my favorite character. She's my "identifier". :) Keep up the awesome work! ~Konran-chan~
diskincluded 2001-04-08 ch 1,	abusedon't do it asuka! don't do it!
Addy 2001-04-06 ch 1,	abuse.......Let me catch my breath.......

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