You get this because that son of a bithc moterfoker Lawra flamed a me and called me a terrible writer! But you deserve it becuase you are terrible writer!

It is horrible. You're a loser with a lame life for writing this. your chapters are too long and too boring. Read and review my story "The get togethers?" so you can see what a real writer can do. If you're smart enough and can find my story that is **.

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Tell that bastard Lawra to stop Flaming a me or I'll flame all peoples related to her in even the smallerest ways!

And you can't report a me! Anon flames are Safe and I will tell I didn't do it ** and my friendx Angel Wings-008 Will proterct me and believe what I say!

A nice, violent woman who hated the world for what it did to her life, and felt the obligation to take it out on everyone.
[The kind of person who would kill everybody around her…]

please]"
[Interrogative missing its question mark]

RESPONCIBILITY
[responsibility]

Chapter 2
dicipline to develope
[discipline, develop]

since they had least to fear from their employer
[Yeah…just death]

before he started to pretend to be a hood ornament
[What ‘pretend’?]

the stratusphere.
[stratosphere]

Chapter 3
against it, as
[Superfluous comma]

by it's weight.
[its]

from beneith.
[beneath]

The pigtailed girl turned to stare at the black and white, winged, humanoid rhino with cat whiskers, tusks,
[Well, at least you gave him an original curse rather than making him a panda]

exeedingly violent
[exceedingly]


She lunged at the other girl with a straight fist, only to have it dodged just slightly with the tilt of her head. The raven-haired girl followed up with a crescent kick to the head, which was forcefully backhanded away, causing Akane to lose balance.
[This seems familiar…]

in excusiatingly bizarre
[excusingly?]

unortodox situations
[unorthodox]

unconcious Akane's
[unconscious]

Chapter 4
I know you much be hungry
[Need I say more?]

into her harms,and
[arms]

A pudgy man in a Maoist uniform greeted.
[Where’d he come from? You don’t clearly transition into a flashback]

slowly deepend
[deepen?]

while occationally
[occasionally]

for her, as a
[Unnecessary comma]

named king
[Yet not capitalized like a name]

‘Yet another’ definitely seems an appropriate title, as this fic doesn’t add much to the community.

I'm happy to see that this story isn't dead and that your still writing. I look forward to the next update.

Lol nice one and I hope that there is soon an update. ;)

Awesomely neat part there, and hilarious to see how Nabs handled things with Ranma and Kasumi in the same area and getting on just a bit.

Funny story.

Genma took a long draw from his beer, "That's about the size of it, Yamazaki."

*snicker*

"MY LITTLE GIRL'S GROWING UP AND DATING! OH I'M SO HAPPY SHE ISN'T A LESBIAN LIKE NABIKI SAID!"

LOL!

Impressive fight scene.

"Shampoo no see anything! Shampoo no see boy Ranma turn to Girl Ranma! Shampoo no have to marry dangerous, violent sociopath boy and be daughter to evil demon father! SHAMPOO SEE NOTHING! UNDERSTAND?!? NOTHING!"

ROTFLMAO!

"DIE RANMA... please?"

LOL! Poor Shampoo. Ranma is just having way too much fun with her.

"Just what we need in this house," Nabiki growled, "An oversexed, violent lesbian. Like we didn't have enough issues with Akane already..."

*snicker*

damn that was so wrong also ranma has a very disfuctional family

damn that was just so wrong but so funny...so ranma is a nut job and a psycho path i cant wait to see what he does to kuno and ryoga

lol Arguing over what beer was splashed on him.

Heh. Genma better hope two weeks is enough time.