yeh know i can beta read for you, i help my friends all the time so if you need more help, just email me the next chapter and i will beta it and send it back. well have a nice day-and i love yer story!

carrie

i really like this story and am bummed that it is discontinued. is there no chance of you finishing it? please?

I'll definitely beta a few for you, but it will have to be sometime in summer because I don't necessarily have much time being in college. But I'll definitely do that! Just go to my bio page and email me if you don't have a reader yet, I'd be happy to help.

Shadow

oh that's so sweet! Please continue!

oh this is good! Love afterlife stories! Especially a normal one! No ludicrous halos! I'd agree with you there. Even though they are cute, never spend an eternity with those!

Shadow

Dont worry about the grammer.I unlike whoever must have commented on it am more set on finding out what happens next and not the whole grammical issues...

I would beta, since I am a native English speaker, however my own is...rather sad and I'm a terrible correcter. *sigh* but all I have to say is no one really cares about your grammer (least not me) so just continuing updating!

oh i really like this story and hope your still continuing it! i cant tell about grammar and such... mabe thats why im getting very low english grades! lol but anyways this is super sweet & cool and i luv it! -heather

You're grammar isn't too bad. The only problem I see is that sometimes you change from past to present tense, such as (i'm making this up):

Harry smiled. He knows he will win.

smiled and knows are different tenses. i think you get my drift.

BUT besides grammar, I LOVE YOUR STORY.

You really should write more often. I really really love this story and can't wait till the next chapter.

i think your doing a great job on these by the way. i loved the pillow fight

Um...this story is pretty good, but it feels a bit rushed. I think it would be better if you slowed the story down a bit. People don't get over the kind of trauma Harry experienced in a day. You need to show Harry working through that trauma and being able to trust people again. Not him getting over it in a day or two. Good premise for a story, but way too rushed.

If you don't have anyone anyone better, I'd be willing to beta-read your stories for grammer and such. Hope that helps. Like the story. Please keep writing.

No offence but you need a better beta, your grammar is awful. Not that I'm the queen of grammar or anything, but alot of the mistakes are really blatant.

I was so glad to see an update for this story. I really like the story, and enjoyed this chapter. Thought the pillow fight was fun, and that they dragged Severus into it.

Like Severus taking care of Harry after their nightmares. Love the tenderness.

Please update again soon.

Thank you.