i have to say that this is written very simplisticly. im not saying i can do better, but this has no depth. im sorry

this is a pretty good fan fic so far, kind of boring at times but i like it,

OHMG! That is so sad!I can't believe Lucius did that to Draco! I am so sad right now. All I can say is OH MY GOSH! My heart is breaking apart and I'm on the verge of crying. I thought Hermione was going to die by either Voldemort or is so scary. Lucius is a F-ing Bastsrd. He should burn in HELL foor all I care! Burn Lucius! Burn!

It's really good so far. Although there are a few mistakes. In one part you put "He said and Harry and Draco hurried away." I'm assuming you meant Hermione seeing as Harry was not there. But anyway.. I'm off to read the rest!

:)

ew! sorry, but i cant stand eminem!

karkar

AW BEAUTY AND THE BEAST! D lol i

I like the story and how you write so far, I just thought about telling you that I'm pretty sure it's supposed to be Hermione.

“Thank you.”

“You have an hour before the feast starts. It’s formal but not too much.” The man said. He laughed merrily and Draco winced slightly. “Well off you go!” He said and HARRY (!)and Draco hurried away. They slowed when they were away from the old man.

I think your plot line is just a little too extreme. I mean, couldn't Dumbledore have just locked them in the "hug room" at Hogwarts instead of all of this nonsensical muggle with a little bit of magic on the side camp thing.

*sniff* such a happy ending! so much fluffly too! GREAT GREAT GREAT STORY! :D

I loved your story...it was very well written, and I am now going to read the sequil to this story.

OMG THAT WAS GREAT!

SO glad that there is a sequel! im gonna go read it now!

if there are two types of dramiones that i love, its the fighting!dramione and the fluffy!dramione

i love it!

O.M.G! WTF?

anywayz.. another mistake!

“Dinner will be ready in…Oh my…” Hermione sprung out of his lap and turned scarlet as Draco raised his hand to his lips to hide a smile. Mrs. Malfoy had walked in on them. “Hermione, explain this!”

you said "mrs. malfoy" instead of "mrs. granger" but thats okay! im really excited for the next chaps!

good job so far! but this sort of disturbed me though..

“You have an hour before the feast starts. It’s formal but not too much.” The man said. He laughed merrily and Draco winced slightly. “Well off you go!” He said and Harry and Draco hurried away. They slowed when they were away from the old man.

you said "harry and draco" instead of "hermione and draco" LOL

The riddle of the sphinx was FOUR legs, then TWO legs, then THREE legs. Getting the three and the two the wrong way round makes it very confusing. The story looks really good though, and I like the idea of the 'friendship camp'. not quite sure what's going on with draco reading to little kids though...