I loved how you wrote this story. It was artistic in a way. The poem was the perfect touch too. Great job.

Hi. This is a very well written story, and I particularly like the way you played with the poem and the different character's thoughts. Although some people may not be able to know who the characters are, I'm sure that a reader who knows the characters relatively well won't have much problems.
There's just one thing I'd like to note on Creed's thoughts: "to watch as INNOCENTS drown in their own fluids". I think that Creed wouldn't see people as innocent or non-innocent. Afterall, if they all envy him, deep inside, because they all would like to give in to their inner animals, so no one is trully innocent. (And even a child will have fun killing a fly, ant or spider - and that's killing, too.)
Anyway, good work!

Wow, that's what I call putting your soul into it. I always thought Sabertooth was a cool character, but wow... Yo get a ten out of ten for this one.

Very eloquent, very bordering-on-disturbing. The only trouble I find with it is that unless you're intimately familiar with the arc this story is set in, it's hard to tell which characters are thinking. But it's still very well written; a definite joy for people who do know the arc. :)

This so COOL! It's really effective how you interate your writing with the poem. It's really beautiful and your wording is, as usual, highly attractive, elegant and PERFECT.

I love this! Xavier, Psylocke, Mystique and Wolvie must really have some issues with him from that period of time. Ya know you COULD do a Vic/Ro fic ^_^ I like Vic/Ro ** and there should be more but NOOOOO everyone wants Ro/Lo or Remy/Ro