Excellent story. Thanks for posting, Beth Palladino

I've just completed your story over several sittings, and enjoyed it very much. Poor Steve, you really put him through the ringer, there, just recovering from one assault to walk bang, smack into another form.

Amber was certainly a 'sick-o', but sadly in today's warped world, these people really exist. Thanks for writing your story. Hoping to read more from you, soon.

This was a wonderfully written story and I enjoyed every word! It was suspenseful and emotional and featured, prominently, that wonderful father/son relationship Mark and Steve have. I look forward to reading more from you in the future!

I like your story very much, I hope you will write an other story soon.

This was a very good story. I loved every moment of it. I had a lot of fun with everything that come with it. Excellent writing.

I have to review chapter 14 and 15 together here. I couldn't get into the 14 review screen yesterday, and I can't get into that chapter at all tonight.

OK, 14.

Did the vodka come from Steve's apartment? I know he's not a heavy drinker, but nothing says he doesn't have the occasional screwdriver or something now and then. If she is trying to frame him, it would certainly be a powerful piece of evidence against him.

Was Stephano under a rock? He really had no idea who Amber McPherson was? Even after the trial, the radio talkshows, and the newspaper?

I had to laugh when you described Steve as the 'smaller man.' Gave the perfect image of the two orderlies as human mountains.

Now 15

That one little tear was just heartwrenching, especially b/c Mark didn't even notice. You picked a heck of a way to break the news to his partner. Why 217 Broken Hearts?

This was such a good story, and it kept its high standard right to the end, when it dipped a little with Jesse's breakfast burrito recipe! The man's a doctor, he should know better.

I hope that you find the time to write another story as good as this, it really was great.
Tracy

What in the world is going on with Steve?

This is all so beautifully orchestrated. This Amber is really pretty clever, as is the author who created her.

Lady, no one needs to remind me never to cross you! I'm not likely to forget.

I think I know what Amber is up to now. That jacket is going to reappear, and Steve needs to make sure he always has an alibi, doesn't he? Why is he in pain THIS time?

So, I was right about the keys, I guess. I am moving right on to the next chapter. This is good stuff!

Hm...Steve never called Mark when he made plans to go see Jonathan. Is that going to be something he regrets? I also noticed that Steve never told Jonathan who 'she' was. We all know, but how did Jonathan? And what did she do to make steve so sick? I think now the keys were to the house. She probably got them from the guys who she hired to beat him up.

Thankyou for a truly excellent story. The plot was wonderful and I think Amber was one of the best written villains that I've seen in a long time. She managed to be a truly menacing presence throughout the story although her actual appearances were limited- very skillful writing. The mouthwash and toothpaste idea as a method of delivering the poison was excellent as was the setup. I also think you did a wonderful job with the interactions of the main characters. Overall an extremely enjoyable read.
Judith
ps- hope you have plans for the next one!

A cryptic comment from Lieutenant Simkins with the conveniently 'cleaned up' records, and a disagreeable Dr. Gibsen. Are these men up to no good, too, or are they just being difficult?

I liked the restaurant joke. Typical Steve/Mark humor.

And I am wondering if the drunk drive was someone Amber pushed too far, then, when the mental health issue was mentioned, I wondered if the driver was amber herself.

Curiouser and curiouser.

An explosive ending!! So glad that Amber got what she deserved! Well done on an excellent story, and I hope you post more soon:)

Were the keys she had copied to the dead doctor's car or to the beach house?

Was her comment about the ocean being deadly another veiled threat against Steve?

I am loving this story!