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| DarkAngel from Hell13 2008-06-19 ch 5,  | abuseI think you should make Harry more Slytherin.It would suit him and the situation he is in better.Oh...and could you make him d descendant of Slytherin...a distant one perhaps...or I don't know, something like that would be nice... DarkAngel from Hell13 |
| Magnificent the Destroyer L... 2008-06-18 ch 26, | abuseI like the premise of this story, and especially the elements that have cropped up here and there (the WOT particularly). I do have one tiny complaint, however, which might seem a tad whiny; in regards to the trial in this last chapter - a dance is much more satisfying when one can see (however figuratively) all the steps that go on in the dance. The elements of the trial scene had the potential to be master strokes of a grand piece of work, if they could have been fleshed out; as they were, they were interesting ideas that read slightly like a transcript. (In other words, impressive material, but not particularly drawing). I hate to give these criticisms - especially as I believe deeply in allowing the characters and story to take the author where the story needs to go - but I felt it needed to be said. Please keep up the good work - the rest of the story has been an enjoyable read! M*T*D*L* |
| Olaf74 2008-05-17 ch 5, | abuseI'm lost of words. Your Story is more than Fantastic. Please continue it as soon as possible. |
| utahtoken 2008-05-12 ch 26, | abuseI like this story, its different I would appreciate an update when possible my email is thanks |
| Moonlight-Poetry 2008-03-29 ch 26, | abuseplease please please finish this, even if it is only a half-assed overview/ plot outline. I would love to know how it ends. |
| Draeconin 2008-01-27 ch 26, | abuseDamn. Just as it was getting interesting, too. I suppose you've abandoned this story, since it's been two years since your last update? |
| Draeconin 2008-01-27 ch 21, | abuseThe story's okay, but I keep finding little holes in it: things that don't get explained. For instance, what was the purpose of Draco beating on Harry (in the chapter in which their uncle was present for it)? One could make assumptions, but one could be mistaken as well. |
| Draeconin 2008-01-27 ch 17, | abuseYou talk about Harry having the power to Channel as if it's a given. So is everyone capable of this talent? If not, when was it determined that Harry had the ability? |
| Draeconin 2008-01-27 ch 6, | abuseI'm having a hard time swallowing Narcissa and Lilly as sisters. What of Bellatrix and Adromeda, who in canon are Narcissa's sisters? Things are getting just a little too convoluted. |
| mjmolly2 2007-11-20 ch 26, | abuseSo far I cannot tear myself away from this story for my other work. Please send notice to when you have completed another chapter. Thanks. |
| nljfs 2007-10-31 ch 26, | abuseI just found this interesting work & would love to know more about what you have planned for Harry / channelling / and the dark arts, as well as Ron, Voldemort, Slinker & Sam. Please consent to updating this story. nancy in chicago |
| b-nothing 2007-09-15 ch 7, | abuseadore it. |
| KaitlynLuneri 2007-09-13 ch 26, | abuseEverything's so clumped together, on every chapter there is a wall of text. The formatting sucks. I cant read this. >__ |
| Jeymie 2007-08-08 ch 26, | abuse*Squeals* this is awesome!! please, get more up soon! |
| Capa 2007-07-20 ch 26, | abusethis is a good story and i think it is well written. keep up the good work! ~haunted~ |