the dilect could use just a bit of work but the story at the end made it all completely worth it. it was right on target! loved it!

*gasp* you have translations for the random words they use! I'm so used to being confused, I don't know quite what to do with it...

Very sweet. Cap'n and River. Bonding is good.

This was priceless I loved it! Not enough Mal/River out there.

That's such a sweet story. Mal's such a softie deep within. He'll look after River.

yayy for peanut butter!! it makes the world go round.
this is good--captures both River and Mal perfectly...and succinctly. keep it up!

This story was read. This story was good. I leave a review of shiny praise. That is the rule. Read the fiction, like the fiction, review the fiction.

Especcially good at "getting into" River's head.

Oh, how did I miss all these Firefly stories of yours? This is another bit of brilliant work, that's another way to look at it, that River lives in her own reality.

That's such a cute story and very well written. Awesome job.

This is wonderfully sweet. I love your characterizations, both of which are I think are hard to do well, and the ending line is a delight. Nice job.

Very cute and very sweet. I love these Mal/River friendship stories and there just aren't enough of them.

I liked this story, I could see both characters acting this way. Nice and gentle, it has an affectionate air about it. Thank you for a well written piece. Shiny. Keep flying, Ali D :~)

Hi,
I like this story, but I found it trying to contact you -- I really, really like your writing - you are really good at showing the characters' voices and using stories to showcase them (apparently we have the same tastes in shows) but I wanted to say that I would like to volunteer to be your beta for grammar and spelling. I promise to be responsive and fast. Please let me know if I can help by doing this -- and I've never done this except on an ad hoc basis so let me know, first if you accept and second, if there are any forms or procedures you prefer to follow.

Thank you for writing and sharing with the rest of us (well, us lurkers, anyway.)

(Also, for what it is worth, I'm a Lord Peter Wimsey fan, if your name is a pen name that originates with Dorothy Sayers - that is the reason I first read your Firefly stories. After that, I read them because you wrote them, not because I recognized the name.)

Nancy Montague
ndmontague@yahoo.com
April 2003

Great story! Very, very well done. You got River and Mal down, I think. Lovely.

How I miss this show! Always knew Mal cares about River even if he doesn't understand her.

What a nice lil' story. Loved it. Write another, please.:)