Wow.. it's so beautiful. Loved it. :)

I think the Yoh and Anna relationship (in the manga anyway) is more subtle and complex than people give it credit for. Oftentimes, authors explore their relationship under the limelight, but you’ve successfully captured the subtlety and complexity of their bond through equally subtle means. Using Jyou and Rieko as mediums (hehe) was not only fitting to the theme of the show, but it also illustrates your capacity in exploring an original concept. After reading this piece, I will never look at Yohna the same way again; the majority of multi-chaptered YohXAnna fics in now seem nearly petty and childish.
Now the criticism.
“He dropped his basket and, overcoming his temerity, laid a thin shaking hand on her arm.” The usage of the word temerity was confusing, (he overcame his courage?), I guess you meant timidity? Small detail but I’m nitpicky like that ;).
Also: “…her mouth widening into her crazy evil smile.” The words you used in describing her smile was a bit jarring, but that’s just me, I just thought there were better ways to phrase it.
On the whole, characterization, language and symbolism were beautiful. The beginning captured attention, the middle was intriguing, and the ending, though not a blatant HAPPY ENDING was fitting and left me with a fuzzy feeling for the rest of the night. I admit I’ve never read any Garcia Marquez works (the style reminded me of Haruki Murakami instead.), but if you were going for a dreamlike-quality, I have to congratulate you.
P.S.: If ever you’re stinking of hubris after this review, I say knock yourself out, because it’s well deserved.

Kudos to you,

Paige :)

...that was brilliant.

Enchanting.

I'll give a longer review complete with breakdown and ratings nexty time. Safe to say that my only problems are tediously technical, and I find the last line said by Anna- as well as the ending line- beautiful.

excellent work.

Beautifully enchanting. One person can only do some much to a story, and you have just successfully accomplished it.

your attempt was a success.

this story is beautiful in so many ways. the way you describe the story was great i had a perfect view on what was going on and it was very sad. i love the part when anna said the sickness was "not being able to love" was brilliant. so keep up the good work!

brilliantly haunting.

That was... very... uhh... interesting? I'm sorry but I don't really get the story very well, and I'm way too lazy to go back and read the whole thing all over again. However, I must say I absolutely loved the YohxAnna bits. Extremely sweet and enchanting, as if they are performing a ritual of their very own. Apart from that, I don't get much else. What can I say? I guess I have a low IQ XD

I've read only a few of your fics, about 4 or 5. Except for certain fics (like The Yamasutra or something like that), the others always suggest a certain calm quality you put in the characters in your fics. Not that I say there isn't enough action or heated arguments, but my point is that at some point or another, the characters act very calmly and coolly, as if they are in complete control of their actions and others'. I think it's really cool.

I have this habit of forming a picture or a scene in my mind to describe something (like what Celin Dion's voice looks like, for example. Crazy, huh? ^_^U). When I finish reading your fics, the first thing that pops up in my mind was a scene of a flat surface of water, kinda like a part of a lake, but has nothing to do with it, just calm, unmoving water, dark blue-violet in color, like a starless night. A single drop of water breaks the tranquility and sends slight, quiet ripples traveling out in every direction across the surface. There was a vague feeling of being in a cave or a tavern, but nothing actually like that, 'cuz that would steal the scene's unrealistic and descriptive nature. Uhh, am I making any sense?

Sorry, it's just that I want someone to know what I think. I've never describe what I observe certain things as to anyone else before. This is the first time. I just wanted you to know this one vision, 'cuz I like it a lot, and it's really calming to me.

It was slightly weird but really really good. What happened with the Jyou and Rieko? I'm sorry I'm really bad at understanding this kind of stuff-_-'could you possibly write a summary?^_^ Please?

great story! pls write more! YOH AND ANNA FOREVER!

This is the best Yoh and Anna fic I have come across. Your characterization is especially unique; particularly the way you write Yoh. And it's so realistic and so in character that it's almost like it could really happen in their future. I think you were very, very successful at this making this fic subtle and just beautiful.

intriguing..

This was a believable Yoh and Anna romance, which in itself is an amazing acomplishment. And the side story is, for lack of a better word, intoxicating.

Time to reread.

I loved your ficlet very much. It's really well written and quite long. Surprisingly, this made me think. I had fun reading, thanks. ^^