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| Nessa Ar-Feiniel 2004-03-24 ch 1,  | abusekeep going on this |
| Klose 2003-01-31 ch 1, | abuseOh, that was eerie. A few mistakes (tense, grammar). The dialogue was very interesting. And the introspection was simply billiant. Imagery is a tough tool to use, but you've done well... I am utterly freaked out. :P |
| Woman of the Dunedain 2003-01-31 ch 1, | abuseYippee! Mandos is incredible! |
| Mouse 2003-01-29 ch 1, | abuse"I read." ;) Very beautiful, in a strange and mystical sort of way. I like her conversations with Mandos in particular, the questions that she answers "No!" to each time. Flinch-worthy dream(?) scene when she "becomes" Feanor at Losgar. And love the poetic thrill in the line "she searches for God". What *does* she look for, ultimately? What does she hope to accomplish in finding Feanor? Lovely and unnerving overall. |
| Cirdan 2003-01-28 ch 1, | abuseInteresting. I think it works because they are in Mandos, so the disassociated feeling matches fairly well. Miriel and Nerdanel, they really did need to chat. Nienor? Turin's sister? I suspect you meant Nienna. But nice little story. Especially like: Have him answer your questions. He will. :) |
| Deborah Judge 2003-01-27 ch 1, | abuseAh, I prefer beauty over clarity any day. And so I like this story very much. A little tricky to figure out in the beginning, but worth it by the end. Love the idea of Nerdanel talking to Miriel, and the conclusions they come to. |
| Maeve Riannon 2003-01-27 ch 1, | abuseI like this story. Your picture of Miriel weaving hate is chilling. And weirdness becomes you! :) |