This is good Kim.Whats going to happen to them though? Are you going to have them hate each other or fall in love or what??
Sory I just really hope that you update this story soon.I hate waiting...!!

Hey chicky, this was really good. I'd like to read more, if you're going to get it posted. :) Also, I read your story, "Yes Sir." Now that was quality. A new and interesting take on all the characters. Keep on writing! :)

*lol*@Jareth getting arested* Oh please go on with the story.

any more??? ^~.~^?

Ineresting beginning! Please add more soon!

keep going Kim I like this and am enjoying it.

well. it's a, uh, um interesting.

ugh...your grammer and spelling was AWFUL! but other than that it was fairly well-written.

More! You just left everyone hanging there, jeez. Now I can't sleep without knowing whats going to happened next!

You're very creative Kim!! I can't wait to read more cause this is really a good story:)

Kim...I hope you have in mind to write more on this story.... I'm really curious to see what will happen nect. Please write MORE!

Kim this is good and you should keep going with it. i want to see what happens next!! Please add more soon

it is interesting, but the grammar and such need work, b/c it confuses the story to have to work out what you meant.ex; "He looked down no that couldn't be shame on his face could it?" and Jareth seemed a bit ooc. *don't* take this the wrong way - I want it continued! I want to see what happens next! It's just that i had to go back and try to see what you meant a couple of times.