Awesome!Plz Update Soon!

^^; Alrighty then!
-This is definitly different, but I have to say, I've never seen that POV on Legolas.
-Why did you have to say, he was GAY, of all the (goes on with cuss words and slang)*&#@...(that sort of stuff)?
-Could you make the chappies longer, please, its really good, but its way too short!

lol, hair appointment.
She could pretend like she's psychic (sp?)and be all 'I fear the mine of moria are lined with death! Or, 'frodo must leave with sam and make gooey eyes at him on top of a mountain!' that would be so funny...

that waz a cute story I hope ya continue it.

Hi

Hmm... you don't like the word "merrily"? Why use it, I wonder? Anyways...your grammar is still uncertain. You should get the help of a beta-reader. Another person to look over your stuff before you post is always a good idea. There was also a lot of cursing in this chapter. A bitchy persona for a character can be achieved without them swearing. Believe me, there are many OC's who are just as bitchy as this girl and alot of them and most do not have the mouth of a sailor. But yes, this is YOUR story and YOUR character and you can have her say what you want. But all this swearing really was not necessary.

So far, this story seems very much like all the other "girl-falls-into-Middle-Earth-and-meets-the-gorgeous-elven-prince" story. There is nothing special that sets it apart from the others and that is what you must strive for! Originality!

I hope this review wasn't taken as a flame. Take my advice seriously and use it to your advantage!

~Jerika

Hello!

This chapter was rather rushed. You didn't bother with the details and that can sometimes be good. But this chapter needed a lot more detail in order for me to enjoy it thoroughly. This reminded me of "The Never Ending Story". Ahh... that was a great movie. But yes, be more descriptive and lengthen your chapters! You seem to have a good sense of grammar and your writing style is nice. I see this story as definitely having potential.

Good luck!

~Jerika

Can we say cliche? Really, do you want your story to be just another unoriginal, done-to-the-death Mary Sue?

And make no mistake. This has all the making of a Mary Sue. Not to mention that her name is the same as your penname. Let me detail the problems of this fic.

- Grammar. Please do not switch tenses; if you want it to be in the past tense, stay with it. Never, ever, change to present tense.

- How can Andina communicate with an inhabitant of Middle-earth? Legolas does not speak English, and I'll assume that Andina speaks neither Quenya, Sindarin, or Westron. A girl found in a middle of nowhere, gibbering in English which no one in Arda can understand, will probably be locked up as a madwoman in some nice equivalent of asylum.

- For that matter, how can Legolas comprehend the book titled "Lord of the Ring", which is clearly in English?

- You have no grasp of descriptive writing, dialogue, or characterization whatsoever.

- If she joins the Fellowship, and judging by the summary, she will, the Canon Police will probably come to have a talk with you.

hahaha, this is a crack up, plz write more... plz?

*blinks* Ok well honestly your story's ok and your character is slowly taking form, but your problum is that its taken four chapters to really discribe your main character. You need to work on discription and the lenth of your chapters, if you keep doing short chapters people are discuraged from reading them you might want to gather up all four and combine them all. But I really like your story dont get me wrong I really like it, I just think that you could do a really kick ** job is you tryed to do a little harder.
~Bex~

LeGoLaS rOcKs!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

wow! that was a great beginning. write more!