Hi

nice story

I THINK IT IS SO CUTE!!PLZ MORE WITH ZXN!MORE MORE

the rating is kinda bad, but other then that it was great!

aw. *sniff*

very very cute story, but when writing a sex scene another time, you ahve to think about that Nami is 18 and Zoro is 19! They have sex like 14-year olds.. hehe, lots of people at their age knows what it's like to have sex.
also, it's not often that you sweat that much even before he's gone into you ;) just a little note :P

I find it very weird that Zoro has to go because he's not qualified+? he's almost the worlds greatest swordsman before they go to grand line, and he's one of the crews best fighters.

otherwides you write very good, and in a very realistic way

the first person narrator is a bit annoying sometimes, cuz it's hard to write with it, but I think that you do it good!

Yeah... Might as well have changed it to rated R.
Not that I mind at all. I luved it! It was lovable :3

update! update! update! i love it so much

I love it! Excellent job. I'm so dissapointed with a lot of people making Zoro gay! I hate that! I adore him! Check out my stoies if you like...

^^ I'm a huge Zoro fan! You kept me wanting to read more all the way to the end! *thumbs up!*

Very cute, just the rating is a little iffy. I would have made it R instead of PG-13. But other than that, I liked it. ^-^

Uhhm. well, good work!