I think you lost readers by making such large time jumps. I mean you make it seem like nothing of importance really happens after Akane's death.

Could you please do another version of this story some time in the future without getting rid of or altering this one. I'd think it would be great if the time line were a bit fuller. There's allot of needed recovery and character growth that just wasn't seen along the way from chapter 1 to the end of this.

Oh and maybe a Spamfic of the rest of the Vacation showing them hanging out with Lilo and Stitch maybe even including Jamba and Pleakly could be fun.

Not certain I'd be able to stumble across more when it comes along on accident so please drop me a line if you do expand on this.

Spokavriel @ yahoo . com

You have tagged this story complete and it is. Can you write a book two? Perhaps wedding and honeymoon chapters followed by a visit to the tribe and the beginning training of our hero(ine)s kids. I vote for one son and one daughter. A chapter outlineing the lives of Kasumi others would be nice too.

Well reviews are like Ranmas luck, them come and go. I just found the other day that some stories I consider classics only have a few reviews. And I wish I could sort stories on my fav list by author as well as title. Think of it this way, some stories are "undiscovered gems". This is one of them I bet.

Well, this was rather interesting.

Very interesting and quite original. Though it could have been a couple hundred thousands words longer, IMHO :)

Great Story. Now that you've introduced Stitch - - I have a half a wish that it was now continued with that direction.

Awesome, dramtic story. I'm glad I read it. Such depth of character development too. Good job.

Very well written fic. I like how you drew the reader into the fic in the beginning. Keep up the good work.

Nice story. A few typo's and such now and then, but nothing devastating. Only thing I feel missing is a proper conclusion to the story. An epilogue would be in order, don't you think? :)

I too agree there should be more Nabiki/Ranma xovers.. And yes, changes in characters are always generally done, otherwise it wouldnt be fanfiction... Very good story.

I do like this story quite a BIT!

Now All that needs is a short final Epilogue where the untied loose ends are tied in Narima and 'Biki' and Ranma are doing what they do best!

Plus an appearence by a Guardian Angel (Akane) wouldn't be bd either. Yeah a bit clique, but still not a bad idea!

dennisud

This requires a sequel!

Cool. Good Story. Good characterization of Ranma and how he deals with his guilt. I also liked how Nabiki... well for lack of a better way of saying it, blossomed in the story into a much more (mentally) healthy person. Thanks for the good read.

Hated this fic for one simple reason, Ranma had done nothing he needed redemption for.

If it hadn't been for that factor, this would have been a good fic.

Yes, I did read the whole fic. I just tuned out what I hated about it.

The premise of Akane dies at Jusenkyo and Ranma is at fault or is blamed for it by others or himself is highly irritating. Ranma didn't cause Akane get into the situation, so if she dies from it, he's not to blame.

Saffron was a dangerous opponent, who Ranma barely beat, and the this points is one of the best for continuations where Akane has died since it's easiest ones to tweak for her death.

If you'd had Nabiki challenging Ranma as a way to keep himself from killing himself because his 'True Love' had died, it would have been fine.

But the idea of Ranma being at fault for Akane's death, and needing to atone is so much garbage.

Please update or I will cry.