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| Murgy31 2008-04-29 ch 14, | abuseThat was great! |
| selmak 2008-04-05 ch 14, anon. | abuse>>some little Hufflepuff actually had written a love note to Snape, only to get it back corrected for spelling and grammar. oh! and he has a weasley sweater of his very own! Very unique storyline, very well written and I liked your OC in this. |
| selmak 2008-04-05 ch 6, | abuselovely story so far! I'm intrigued to find a story where Ron isn't a complete prat. Hogwarts Express is interesting :) and Squirrel returning, unexpected. al-Hadoud is a realistic OC so good job! |
| Besarien 2008-03-12 ch 14, | abuseLoved your story. The gift of time was a perfect gift for Snape. I loved that Ron gave Rafi Ginny's old doll house too. A splendid tale all in all. I expect I'll read the sequel too- but not tonight since it's already past my bedtime. Thanks for a most enjoyable evening. I'm putting you on my favorites. |
| Besarien 2008-03-12 ch 6, | abuseI like al-Hadoud. He's interesting and for some reason Ben Kingsley is playing him in my mind movie with an all-British cast. I look forward to seeing how he developes. During Snape's game with Dumbledore, this line really stood out: “I see. I suspect you learned some of the disadvantages of using live pieces then.” “Speak for yourself, Albus,” Snape said with a smirk. Whoo, reading it a second time I still get a bit of a shiver. Well spotted that you recognized this about Dumbledore way back in the day. Sorry if it's a pain for you that I'm not reviewing by chapter. I tend to do this when really engaged in a story. |
| Besarien 2008-03-12 ch 4, | abuseJust stopping to let you know that I really love this part: "Well, he’d never seen a chess championship when he’d looked for himself. Maybe Potter would find something he wanted just as much his parents someday." Terrific story! Draco's possession was suitably disturbing especially since Lucius engineered it. I don't know too many writers who could maintain a sense of tension and anticipation while describing a chess tourney to non-players. I think that's precisely what you're achieving here. My big floppy hat is off to you as I bow deeply in admiration. |
| Besarien 2008-03-12 ch 1, | abuseWonderful start. You sound like a chess enthusiast. I am, though a very good one. I do like to play though and can appreciate other people's brilliance. I have heard very good things about this story and can't believe I haven't read it yet. I love the idea of Ron and Severus bonding over chess if that's where you are going with this. |
| Gaila 2008-02-29 ch 14, | abuseI know this was written a long time ago, but I wanted to drop you a line to tell you how much I've enjoyed this story. It was very original (which can be hard to find in fanfiction), and I really enjoyed the pace of the story. Oh...and Snape getting a Weasley sweater--that is just too funny! Thank you for a great read, Gaila |
| Tara 2008-02-21 ch 2, anon. | abuseLove it! But something bugs me - why does Ron refer to Harry and Hermione by their surnames? Like, he calls Hermione "Granger". That's an insult. |
| Fayra Lee 2008-02-15 ch 14, | abuseNow this was a wonderful ride. :-) I now this is an old story, but got here by some rec-list just today. I’m glad to see there’s such good stuff at FFNet, lol. And I don’t even play chess, but you made me wish I did. You really made it sound so exciting. In a clever and deep kind of way, of course, but thrilling anyway. And the last letter made me feel all warm inside. I was so sorry for Snape and the way he was being treated, and I was so glad he got a happy moment in the end. Oh, and Ron is also lovely. I wish he was more like this in real canon. I miss the strategist. But what I loved the most, what I absolutely adore it is the chess pieces. Malfoy´s is cool, Filch´s cats are great, and all the others (Quidditch! Plants!) are adorable, but Snape´s set tops everything. Death Eaters pieces, using Unforgivables on each other! My, how I LOVE this. Snape is the best. His set it the best. And you’re the best for thinking it up. So… it’s a long time you wrote this, and since I didn’t check your profile (yet) I don’t know if you’re still in the fandom, or if your style has changed, or whatever, but I wanted you to know this story’s still great. Congratulations. ^^ |
| terri 2008-02-05 ch 3, anon. | abuseLike Hermione, I don't need to see the board or the players to know when I'm outmatched. I'm too competitive to have ever learned chess; when my grandfather tried to teach me, I was already too stiff-necked to learn. Noce job--an amateur at chess like me can enjoy the story. Possession of the board--I take it, then, that puns are permissible in posting. |
| Airily 2007-12-28 ch 14, | abuseSincere characters. Think most readers would grow very fond of Ron and Severus, if they hadn't already felt so, due to this story. Lovely work. |
| tearsofphoenix 2007-12-16 ch 14, | abuseSeeing the time of the writing of this story I can only repeat how lucky was it, because was possible to give Snape a background that we didn't yet know. You did it very well writng this OFC character, an old mentor more caring than Albus, it seems, and able to made amends. Snape in your story is clearly a bright hero, as we wished he was, and not a doomed tragic person. Is a great relief to have him written like this in fandom, and to see that beautiful old stories like your are still readable without thinking to the AU end of DH ;-) |
| tearsofphoenix 2007-12-16 ch 7, | abuseI'm in the - perhaps little - group of those that love Ron's character in the book. He is such a normal boy with all the silly worries of the youngsters, and he has some good reasons for being, sometimes, an impulsive and sensible guy. But in fandom he has rarely a relevant role to play, and isn't easy to find a good story with him able to share a sort of friendship with Snape, that's why in the past I didn't search for that kind of stories and preferred SS/HG or mentorships with Harry. Doing this I've missed until now this reading, and it was a pity, because this story is very interesting and captures very well the redhead's character, giving him justice as a person able to live HIS own adventure. Thank you for the gift of a very nice story. |
| tearsofphoenix 2007-12-16 ch 4, | abuseI love McGonagall-Snape 's game. you have captured here very well how we all hoped that they shared a sort of understanding and respect, together with a nice rivality, and this will always stay as a reminder to us of the way JK showed that neither Minerva was friend to him. But this relationship, in your story, is believable and very good. Well done. |