Poor Dai-chan. Poor Hikari-chan. It was a wonderful fic.

Ben,
Once again, you've written another beautiful story. It doesn't need to rewritten, it's not a cliche, it's just a simple and wonderful concept of everlasting love. I've read this about 3 or 4 (or maybe 8...hehe...) times, and I'm still amazed by how beautiful it is. Great work!

~Mini

sad story with an excellent twist!

GREA+ fic.!




ThE tRees On FiRe! ThE tRees On FiRe! LeTs All jUmP iN tHe FiRe In ThE tRee!

Oh dear... That was a really unexpected twist... I feel like I'm about to start crying... Even if you were tired when you wrote this I think it turned out really good, I might just suggest fleshing out the conversation between Davis and Gatomon, and then between Davis and Kari when he tried to leave the last time. It came off as evasive like I think you planned, but it seems like it needs a little bit more to it. Otherwise, s'a very touching story... The twist wasn't at all what I was expecting. Keep up the good work... ;_;

aww. That was so sad.I should have seen that coming.I really should have.

Oh well, I didn't.so I'm dozy today! Anyways, brilliantly done.v. pathetically angsty.but in the best way!

Keep up the brilliant work!

Yours

Shawna

I like this. Very cool. I liek the angel thing you did. See ya!

Ahh...he died! *sniffles* Although it is very sad, it's also very cute....poor Kari! Poor daisuke! *sobs* I liked this fic...very sad, but you did capture the emotiones very well. And once doesn't know how it ends until one reads it. Keep up the good work!

*shrugs* you dont have to tell me its cliched, fic dude. I just needed to write something for fun and to kick-start me back into a writing mood. more interesting stuffs on the way, I promise!

Why am I not surprised that this fic turned out to be another lame cliche after another with Davis and Veemon being killed off in the end!? I advice, write this fic over, and put more of an interesting story!

omg, that was really random but it was really cool. it had that whole cry me a river thing going on.

This was a nice one shot story and the ending of it caught me by surprise. Hope to see your fourth Internet series story real soon.

Before I go, I want to say that if you ever have the time go ahead and check out my stories. I've just finished one and I am working on the other right now.

A great story, sad but short.