Well things are finally looking up! :) 100 chinups holy moly.

I wonder what happened to Genma...

And just a sidenote, i'm really really happy to see that the timing of Mrs. Tendo's illness and Genma's disappearance works within the correct time frame. If Ranma was a youngster when Genma left, that means Akane was the same age. And in the manga her mother passed away when Akane was a toddler. So, it works. awesome. I pat you on the back. hehehe (I get extremely nitpicky with "timelines" and the sort)

nice story so far! I can see your writing improving as you write more chapters, so don't stop. :D

I totally forgot about the curse! haha

fat and slow Ranma! lol it breaks my heart, but makes me laugh. that's a funny picture :D hehehehe

::goes on to Chapter 3, still giggling::

Well, i read up to chapter one so far, and aside from the grammar mistakes that can be easily fixed up, I like it! :) It's interesting the way Ranma had to sacrifice his love of martial arts for his other love, Akane. How cruel of you to deny him both! :P I'm gonna go on to read Chapter 2, now... who know's, maybe Ranma will somehow regain his abilities... maybe not... okay, enough babbling, i'm gonna going on to Chap 2!! :D

Didn't expect to like the story...but, guess what?! I did! Can't wait for more to come...

Impressive... I love reading ranma fanfics.
Keep it up. I want to see more.
Thanks,
Vinnie

Quite good. No, make that really good. I like this fic. It reminds me of Messed Up, but has a different twist.
I'm looking forward to further chapters and hope you'll post/write them _soon_!

Not bad at all. A few comments: the gym scene doesn't seem to make much sense. From the students' reactions, Ranma should have difficulty doing 10 chinups; it doesn't make a lot of sense for the coach to up the requirements so drastically. Perhaps if Ranma had said something so that the coach could respond to, but out of the blue? (An alternative would be to have the coach simply verbally abuse Ranma when he goes to do the 10, as a "motivational technique").

But more distressingly, you then have Ranma do the 100 chinups easily! This entirely negates the point that you had been making elsewhere, that Ranma retains his knowledge but not his conditioning. (And if you could hold firm on the getting into shape takes a while, that'd be impressive; most fics end up cheating the time it takes to develop the body).

Also, a summary would be good. Even if it's something simple, like "After losing Akane, Ranma tries to run away from his life. But, events happen, and Ranma finds himself in a parallel universe where Akane is alive, but his circumstances are quite different..."

You've done a good job of setting up a mystery for Ranma to pursue,so you're not stuck just having Ranma train, go to school, beat up the insensitive clods, and carry Akane off into the sunset. I look forward to how you develop this in the future.

hi folks!

thanks for the nice reviews.

pilgrim.

thanks for your input. I realize that my grammar could use some improvement. The 'inconsistent tenses and subject/verb agreement' you mentioned really open my eyes in where I am lacking. I'll keep in mind to use past tenses when I am narrating.

risingsun.

which part of chap 1 did you find confusing? thanks to you i am forced to come up with a title. This title is temporary until I come up with a much better one. My summary still needs some work I know.

terraepon.

I hope chap 5 answers your question. I am huge fan of restart stories myself.
1. I agree.
2. Yep. Long hair Akane, I gotcha.
3. The other supporting casts will make their appearances in this fic, but rest assured that I won't adding be adding them for the sake of simply adding them. If they do appear then there is a good reason they do appear.

vizeerlord.

I will try.

pikasparks

My writing brilliant? Oh please stop you're embarrassing me. Thanks for the tip. This fic now accepts anonymous reviews.

I will endeavor to be gentle and constructive:

Your biggest issue is inconsistent tenses and subject/verb agreement. Half the time you're writing in the past tense, and half of the time you're writing in the present tense, sometimes switching tenses in the middle of a paragraph or a sentence. In English fiction it's more or less traditional to use past tense for the narrative and whatever tense is appropriate (past, present, or future)for the dialogue.

Hey, this is actually a really interesting story! the first chapter was sorta confusing, but the plot is great! I'm hooked! tho, as a helpful hint, you should really change the title and summary- its a big turnoff to those who would potentially read it. I think this is great! can't wait for more.

Ah, heh...I didn't see the extra chapters...
Looks like you got his martial art ability down pretty well...

Now, if Soun went along with Genma, why is Soun back? Hopefully you'll remember this point...

-Joshua

Ah, I always love restart stories....and this one is quite different...

A couple things to keep in mind as you continue:
1) Ranma should be able to remember everything about the Art, but his body won't be up to it. So he should be able to a lot more than the Ranma he replaces could, but no where near the level his old self was at

2) Akane's hair would be long right now...

3) Ryoga, Ukyo, and the Amazons have no reason to be there, unless Ryoga happens to be passing through (but just that, he has no reason to STAY there)

-Joshua

tempting, keep it up

Heya!

Firstly I'd like to say that even though English is not your first language, your writing is brilliant! I haven't noticed any mistakes. (Which is more than I can say for myself and I AM English o.o!)

Secondly, I love this idea! It has great potential. It's great to see how Ranma's dealing without martial arts. And he seems to be taking the bullying thing quite well.. although he DOES have an ego the size of Tokyo, so that's plausable.

Anyway! Just to say that I love this and can't wait for more. Hurry up and write more chapters! ^_^

(P.s. you'd probably get more reviews if you took it off "signed reviews only")

Okay.. For your first story this has potential, a lot of potential.

Hmm not many spelling errors. An original plot. A complete turn around from the original story.

So this is the retelling of Ranma 1/2 as if Ranma never went to China. Excellent Job. Keep up the great work. I would like to see more chapters.