That was cool. And somehow true.

I have one word for you: Wow. I truly like your wirting style, and I've never heard of someone depicting Ryou as dark inside, he seems to always be described as light and happy. Good job! You also have an interesting beat that stays consistent. I've seen few poems that stay within the paramaters that they set in the beginning.

Otogi: I give Dark Gatomon a gold star!

Shut up. Sorry, it's force of habit to throw my 'muse' in my reviews.

On a totally unrelated topic, I saw you're review for Sozuki's 'Please Kill Me' and I think you're an excellent critic. If you don't mind, could I send you the first chapter of a story that I think I'm going to post? To tell you the truth, it just popped out of thin air (known also as the inside of my head) and I just went with it. My friend thinks I should go with it, but I'm not too sure. I really have no idea where I'll take it from where I left off...

I would also love to have some tips on my writing style, which I fear has gone down the drain, so to speak, since my English teacher last year pummeled a new way of writing into my brain. The new idea and old one are very different, and frankly it's confusing me.

It's perfectly all right if you don't have the free time or just don't want to, but like I said, you're style of writing is very unique and I think I could learn many things from you. If you are interested,you can tell me in a review but it would be easier just to e-mail me. (fairywings03@hotmail.com)

Thanks.

(P.S.~I think you should write more poems like this, they're very moving.)

Interesting perspective on Ryou. It would be really cool if you could write a fic based on this. If you're not, could you let me try?

*shivers* Nice. Not a lot of people take this perspective of Ryou. I'm glad that you did; and besides that, it was a great poem. =^_^=
~Neko-chan

yami richie- muhahahaha! i don't hide it! i'm eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeevillllllllllllll!

richie-uh,right. why don't you tell them how you evily created hte pinyata.

yami richie-um...how was i supossed to know that humans liked candy!? back in egypt,candy was bad! it gave you cavities!

richie-whatever yami....anyway...good! i like!

y. richie- i'm evil! EVIL!!!

richie-oh for once shut up! *hit's yami with chi-chi's fryingpan of doom* buh-bye now!

wow, i never thought of Ryou like his yami before. u do have a point there

cool! I like this very much--it's an interesting point of view. Kinda goes for all of us, y'know? We all haveta fight our dark sides--only Bakura looks like he's winning...does that make sense?
Mokuba: No.
Marisa: *rolls eyes* Gee Mokuba, thanks.
Mokuba: ^_^ You're welcome.
Marisa: ............


Moony Poetry Rating: 11!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

GREAT! AN ELEVEN! GOOD JOB!!!!!!!!

Ooh, good job! ^_^

I really like the way you wrote this and the whole concept behind it. It's sometimes hard in the TV series to tell which person is in control when. And if Ryou is as sweet and innocent as Yuugi, and the whole yin/yang thing is true, then why isn't Bakura as nice as Yami? He often acts more like Malik's Yami. And we all know Malik is no sugar puff. ^_-

Anyway, great poem.