Wow, after reading that last review someone left you, I figure you're either angry or disappointed. Anyway, I think you should check out "The Perfect War" by Ephemeral Dreams (my other pen name) on fictionpress.com Mary Sue-ness won't kill you...
~ E.D.

GGOODD DDAAMMNN IITT!! YOU BE DAMNED HELL RAISER!!
IT WAS HORRIBLY DISGUSTING IN THE ORIGINAL MARY-SUE BUT THIS IS JUST LIKE IT!!
YOU **!! HOW DARE YOU TRY TO MATERLIZE YOURSELF IN LORD OF THE RINGS.IT'S STUPID ENOUGH THAT"SHE'S SO BEAUTIFUL, SHE'S THE BEST WORRIOR,SHE'S SOME SORT OF MYSTICAL PRINCESS OF A FORGOTTEN RACE BLAH BLAH BLAH" BUT ON TOP OF THE IDIOCY AND STUPIDITY lEGOLAS FALLS IN LOVE WITH HER!! YOU ARE DISGRACFUL AND INDICENT, YOU **, YOU HOE, YOU **!!

OH YA THIS IS NOT A FLAME IT'S A WARNING: NO MORE MARY-SUE CRAP!! I'M WATCHING YOU ,I'VE GOT SANTA ON MY SIDE!!

cool start to your story. reminds me of my own, one of the original few assassin stories LOTR style, lol. fun to read other stories with the same subject but with different writing style

~ ElveNDestiNy

I like it moy moy! What a brilliant plot, an evil daughter!! I do wish legolas wouldn't act so childish though, i mean, i think he should at least listen to his friends, he has known them longer than he's known this dame. Anyways, besides the chapters being short i love the story. So interesting, and the plot is brilliant!! So sad that she must be evil, but i suppose if she falls in love with legolas she may chance, although it would be hard to turn against her father. BTW, who's her mother? Anyways, love the story!! Update soon pls!

~ winter

Hi, it's me, Stephanie. This is one of the few reviews that don't hate ur story, so make it last.
Anyways, you should be able to express yourself on this site and not be yelled at for it! You onl ymade a small change and made Sauron had a daughter, I've seen bigger changes! That's all the puny things I have to say, toodles!

please continue soon! this si my last day of mid-winter break, and tomorrow and sunday is my baby cousins' birthdays (1 boy 1 girl) so won't be reviewing till probely next weekend. but anyway great story , keep up the good work!


~Queen of the Evil Evil Butt Bunnies~
~Jennifer~

Hey, have you ever heard of the Official Fanfiction University of Middle-earth? You really, really need to take some classes there, because you obviously need some fanfic training.

If you wish to avoid great pain, I'd suggest you don't create mini-Balrogs (what the heck is 'mithrille'?) and I'd suggest that you get a plot, and read some books by a man named Tolkien. I know you're going "Huh? Who's he?" He's just some guy, created this sort of world called Middle-Earth, and all its people, like Legolas and Aragorn and stuff. I'm sure you've never heard of him -- not like he's important or anything -- but that's your loss, then.

Oh, and Sauron couldn't possibly have children. a) he's a Maia, b) no respectable woman would even look at him, c) it just makes for a perfect Mary Sue.

Okay, sorry for trying to help.

~Rosie Cotton aka The Evil Author (tm)~

I love this story! please update soon! I have to know what happens to Legolas *gets a dreamy look in her eyes* ohh Legolas.^_^ lol I'm a big fan of him can't you tell :) please update this soon! it could us some more detail, but other then that it's aswome!

~Queen of the Evil Evil Butt Bunnies~
~Jennifer~

It's me,myself, and I.
I just want to see how long it will take for me to get this review.
I'll have to get the annonoumous reviewers thing changed.LOL. I like my story.:)

This story has possibilities. I think with a little development it could work out to be a great addition to the Lord of the Rings.