I have read this story over and over again and It is one of my fost favorit stories on this sight. I hope that you will put more chapters to it Im hopin that this isn't the end. You have such a wonderful talent and I can't wate to see what you do next.

very nice

keep up the good work

:/ Your not doing another chapter? that's a real let down man I read this story a long time ago but forgot and now I remember and go back hoping to find a whole bunch of other chapters and nothing -tears-

love it!

this is good when will the next chapter be up?

Oh My Gosh! Your story is awsome! I have never read a story that had my emotions in a twist like yours has done to me! Whats going to happen next? How many kids do they have? Please upodate soon! I tink I'm going to cry..

Wow! This is a brilliant story. I LOVE IT! :D

I'm just sad you haven't updated in so long... It's almost at the end. >_<

I hope you can spare the time to update soon.. Ja ne!

Poor, poor Inuyasha will he ever find happiness.Please update

so romantic. so sad. so TOTALLY AWESOME!

GAH!! Once again, I've read a wonderful story to be disappointed when there is NO ENDING! It's been over 4 yrs, so I am assuming you have no intention of completing this fic..and that really sucks. X(

The storyline is pretty good, and the amount of detail is great. It’s sometimes hard to capture the right mix of dialogue and detail, but I think you managed quite nicely. As far as criticism goes, and it’s just a mechanical thing, you switch tenses a little bit. Seeing as how most of the story is in past tense I would change your present tense statements to match. Just to provide some examples (I picked them randomly from a chapter):

He [wondered]-(past) if she [knew]-(past) how her smile [is affecting]-(present) him. Should be: He wondered if she knew how her smile affected him.

He can tell from her scent and movements that her instincts are beginning to take over. (whole sentence is present tense)
Should be: He could tell from her scent and movement that her instincts were beginning to take over.

He [wanted]-(past) to see how well she [can]-(present) control herself when or if her demon rage [takes]-(present) over.
Should be: He wanted to see how well she could control herself when or if her demon rage took over.

I don’t know if you read through your chapters before you post them, but if you do a lot of those kinds of things might be caught ^_^ It’s a real pain to start, but once you start it becomes habit and your writing becomes that much better. Other than that, you’re doing well and I look foreword to reading more of your stories!

i like it update soon!!

i totally loved it!!i usually say that to most stories but i mean it all the time...cant wait for more!i usually say that too but i still mean it!

aww that was so kawaii except for that future part it made mo cry