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| Facia 2004-09-16 ch 1,  | abuseReally slow paced, but in a good way. It was really realistic and you described everything, and I thought the idea of someone not that interested in training but just being out was really good. |
| Raichu 2003-08-02 ch 1, | abuseGot hooked on this story straight away. I'm impressed how well you covered different aspects of Jasper's life, thoughts and challenges. The change in the character comes across believably. There's no earthshattering suspense or climax, but there doesn't need to be. I found the story readable and enjoyable as it is. You only give vague hints as to Deimos's background and why Deimos takes to Jasper at all. This may be intentionaly on your part, but I would have liked to have known more. How does the psychic bond between them come about? I wonder if it would read better if the last two paragraphs were reversed? The sight of the PokeCentre suggests the idea of a hot shower. And the story ends with an affirmation of the unusual bond between this trainer and his Pokemon. What do you think? |
| Lady Barbara 2003-04-27 ch 1, | abuseThis is just another example of why you're on my favorite authors list. A nicely done short story about a trainer and an EEvee/Umbreon. Empathy and bonding are an essential part of the training process IMO and the psychic bond between Jasper and Deimos confirms this. |
| Antithesis 2003-03-20 ch 1, | abuseThis story was nicely written. I especially liked the dynamic between Jasper and Deimos. I personally would have liked a little more description when you said, "Jasper could feel his Pokémon’s presence in his mind, for just a moment..." But I still think it's good. |
| Lobo Kendo 2003-03-18 ch 1, | abuseI really enjoyed this fic, Morbane. Well, actually I enjoy anything involving EEvee but your talents make it better than the every day EEvee-involved fanfiction. Great job once again. |
| Banzai Ryu 2003-02-19 ch 1, | abuseThat was a beautiful piece of fiction. I enjoyed it immensely. I don't think you need to change anything about it, really. It was wonderful. I look forward to reading more of your stuff. ^_^ Oh, two things though. You had a couple of sentences near the beginning that were tto long, I think, and should have been split up into different sentences. Towards the midlle of the piece, I think you used some prepositions that didn't quite work in the sentences you put them in. But really, wonderful work. I am really looking forward to reading more of your stuff. -Banzai |