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i loved it

Beautiful

Gorgeous. Love the slow and careful pacing of the story. I reckon that Dumbledore heard almost all of Severus's thoughts through Legilimency :) *sigh* The words are just so gentle, and due to recent book #6 events, this story makes me want to cry. Lovely!

This is extremely beautiful for words. I love how accurately (in my opinion) you described both Dumbledore and Snape. The story shows just how much is the trusted bond between the two people and the pain that Snape feels, which I think many writers seemed to overlook or couldn't be bothered with. Beautiful, really beautiful. =)

"My robes are not the kind for hunted children to hide behind; no respite is found in my shadow. This darkness inside of me is a devouring void, having sucked away many a soul."

Simply beautifully put!

LT

Beautiful. I love how you write, and your Severus is good. You are awesome with imagery. You go girl!

Oh, that's just gorgeous..."My two lords are different like night and day.
One forces me to my knees with mind-numbing pain. The other drags me to my feet with heart-wrenching gentleness." That's beautiful, and exactly how I see the AD/SS relationship. I'd love to see more of this, you have a very evocative writing style.

Oh yes! That's exactly how I feel about them! Great story!

Beautifully written, I really enjoyed reading this

Truly, this is one of my favorites to re-read. I love how you capture the voice and actions of both characters. It is a sad fic, but somehow seems to hold a small hope for Snape. Wonderful.

~BlackBird

In Hell.

^_^ Good answer. I liked this piece.

Just fix the 'when while you rest' to 'when will you rest', kay?

Very touching - I really liked it. I was just browsing about and I am pleased I found your short story!

OOh, bravo! So touching, and very true to both characters. I especially like these parts:

"Manipulative and powerful they might be, but where it counts, my two lords are different like night and day. One forces me to my knees with mind-numbing pain. The other drags me to my feet with heart-wrenching gentleness."

and

"This man, old in body and young in heart, understands me, younger in years but born ancient."

Beautifully and succinctly sums them up. A lovely piece.

that was so good. very touching

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Interesting idea you got there. A nice little touch of sadness and emptyness in it, just the right weight. Good work.