You really don't watch much DBZ do ya kid? Ya messed up everything, though fanfictions kinda do that, this is as messed up as a house of mirrors. You distorted everything good in DBZ. You are making everybody soft little pansies. I mean, Gohan never reached SSJ2? And Cell is around? And Goku is fighting Vegeta instead of Cell? A disgusting insult to DBZ i say! Hell, Vegeta would be clawing to fight Cell, save Kakarot for later! And Cell is around and Goku can go SSJ4? You have even tapped into corrupting Dragonball GT!
Your fanfictions are sick they are soo bad. And I am actually doing a favor telling ya what I feel! I shouldn't even bother though!
A flame for the day, ahh i feel so good, you are lucky to get my blazing flaminess for I reserve it for only special fanfictions.
My gosh. And I thought some stories displayed people out of character to the actual anime! Whis takes it too a whole new level, amazing! And well, Damn, you need detail kid. I mean, what is the time of day, year, mood. You write like your a frickin' second grader doing a report on lawns weeds or somthing. Boring and childish is what I say. Even skimming your fanfiction (all you need to read it is so lacking in concrete material) is like being Nibbled to Death By Ducks.
Here is my advice. Go to school, listen to the english teacher for a change. And also, when you write, actually read what your fingers are pressing on the keyboard. Your writings are so dull, factless, and overall tasteless that I am left with a bad flavor in my mouth afterward. Why not go read some other fanfictions for a change, ones that are actually worth taking up space on Fanfiction.Net! Like "Once Upon a Chibi" by Candyland, or "Wish for the Past" By Burenda. Or Maybe "Dragonball X" by Azuri, though you'd have to go to her homepage to get the entire fiction.
So kiddo, if your going to bore the population of fanfiction.net with your uninteresting load of text and typos, don't bother. Be thankful I took my time to properly review and tell ya EXACTLY what I thought. Not like those other, meaningless reviews that are just "good" and that's it. So, if ya are actually listening, do us all a favor and write better stories, something we can actually read through and feel warm and fuzzy because there is spectacular plot, feeling, visual, and all the good makings of a fanfiction, all things that yours are lacking profictianly.
Good evening to Ya Sepiro-thingy
Review two, i 'skimmed' your stories and i'm amazed, never have i seen so MANY typos, you either need a beta reader, or to open your eyes. And i thought i made typos O_O. Plus, your wording is poor, explanations poor, detail poor, must i go on flaming? Not really, but i will, that "every chapter must be a new story" is a pain in the ass to those who are trying to find GOOD stories in the DBZ section. Ok i' done -_- i say no more
Did you KNOW you CAN update all the chapters into ONE story? Sheesh, i'd think it would be simple i mean, it isn't THAT difficult? *grumbles* people can't even properly post a story, sad, and i never even read it, not going to either because if your that clue-less with chapter uploading, than you must be that ignorant with words. Good Bye
-Raven, Karasu, Corvus or Malphas
u don't watch much dbz do u? but still great fanfic
hkljhfa 7/1/01 . chapter 1
If u just wrote how nail was fused wit piccillo then why was he in half the storie
kljlbn 7/1/01 . chapter 1
ok the power in these stories are seriously messed up u haven't let gohan get any power yet but theres still a lot of time left for me to read so there ok so far
Rachel 1/1/01 . chapter 1
Big mastakes! Dende is seposed to be god of the earth, Gohan can go SSJ & SSJ2, so there would be 3 SSJ's, and where the hell is Goten,because he's seposed to be in here!
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