It was really wel written. The foreshadowing was well played, and I loved the relationship. My only critique is that the last word 'bro' should have been 'bubba'. As a southern girl, I call my brothers that and it seems more fitting to Jake's speech patterns. If you didn't want critique's sorry, I still loved it. Keep Writing

-Azzy

it was a good one thanks

Aw I loved it! Everything about it! I'm from South Texas and I loved the accent you gave them. I was hearin Jakes voice while I read and I LOVE that!

Crystal

aw very cute characters were all even though jake really did talk like that in the show it was a little difficult to im sure difficult to write as very good story...kepp writing mmorfe:):)

LOVED IT UPDATE SOON

I really loved your story! It was great the way you made us be able to feel Jake's anger that Matt was doin' what he'd done. I really enjoyed it and hope you write more about Matt and Jake.

Are you going to write at more? its good! keep it up!

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interesting, cya later.

this is a really good story i just think you should update but so far it is a very good story.

i loved the whole accent me bein' a southener, but don't agree with Ducky 05 do you read things that aren't for 10 year old if not don't ead the story and get on with your life.

xnewfiexmuttx to review a story you actually have to read it and it is called fan fiction it doesn't go acoording to the movie

Erm...I haven't read this yet, I just saw the summary and figured I'd comment...It's really old, so I doubt you (as an author) are even still active but...

Jake's an only child. His mother says in the movie "Jake, you're my only son, and I love you, but sometimes you are too much like your daddy."

Just so you know.

awesome

Really good! I have a q though what is a mry sue?

Really like what is going on Doing a great job!
Keep it up:)

I believe this story is good. You really show Jake's character off well. He's not fake...he's real. Good Job.
Hope you add more soon!

This is a good story, please write more! Although, the beating part was a little harsh. I'm not sure, but brother-beating-brother would be considered abuse, wouldn't it? I don't know , though. Anyways, it's really goo. Please keep writing! K-