omg!MORE!

wow how weird but update this story soon

also please e-mail me whe you update

Well I SUPPOSE YOU TRIED

IM SORRY BUT YOU MIGHT WANT RE-READ YOUR STORY

There are Quite a few statements that dont make sense like:

When the jet-plane landed, a mysterious blonde woman appeared. She was Juuhachigou's age. It was Candace!

How is candance going to be 18's age. #18 is about 18 years old because she doesn't age, being an android and all.

And just how old is Marron b'cuz the begining she says

...When I was little, I couldn't say what my grand parents got me for special occasions! ...

But then you called her 'Little Marron'

and there are maany other things that dont logically fit together

Nice attempt but pleases, please try harder next time

It might help to do research on the androids , 18 and krillin or dbz in general. (EVEN THOUGHT THERE IS LITTLE INFO GIVEN TO FANS BY AKIRA TORIYAMA, plenty of people have managed to write great k/18, android,pre-android, and everyother kind of fic there is to be written. That make since and were well worth the time it took to write, read and have them reviewed.

Please do not take this personally, You are not the only person to write a really bad fic and will not be the last.

But do try and improve

Not bad! But, you know, Juunanagou was wished back with the Dragonballs when they wished everyone who'd been killed by Cell back. You have to remember, in one of the final scenes in DBZ he is shown holding his hands up for the Spirit Bomb. But it's good nonetheless. Keep it up, okay? (I love the cyborg fics... too bad there aren't very many)

hi! me again! you must be getting sick of me... anywayz, you have ANOTHER good fic so i'm gonna comliment you andi love it and i want you to write more, bye bye!

well is this getting exciting! whoa! make the next chapter soon!

L8R

Aruba

hey my kawaii Juunana is not dead. if you have seen the end of the buu saga you would have seen him help Goku with the Genki dama. i quote

'hey its that guy again, goku i havent heard his voice in a long time' end quote

. so please change it

I loved your story. Iwas wondering if I can put it on my site. My site is based on 17 and 18. Email me back if you want me to. I will give you full credit.