This is a really good story .But you should plan (in my point of wiew)to finish you're other stories like "Blood Leprechaun","To Honour" or "Listen".Although I understand if you don't have time

You´re story is very good but the idea of Thrall having a children with a nightelf is..how should I put it..just not right.

Other then that this story is very good.

hmm you deleted dawn can wait :/ now what? where can i find it?

Wow. Quite good indeed, although at this point I expect nothing less from you ^^.

9/10 definitely.

Do you mind if Shattered Enigma hosts this one as well? http://shatteredenigma.com if you don't remember, and my e-mail is dark-elk@ananzi.co.za.

Keep up the excellent work!

Fight on,
Dark-Elk

interesting

Finally you've updated. I thought that I might have to re-read the past chapters but it seems that I remember them as I read this one along. The storyline is now more clear, now that you've abandoned the policy of merging two stories into one.

*snickers* Yes, Leo, fear Thrall. Ha! (Sorry. I thought that last sentence was just too cute.) I'm worried about Jadece, now, though. And I sense lots of plot twists ahead!

A few quick comments...do orcs really live to be sixty years old? I'm not sure; they might in the Warcraft universe. I think I figured out once that Grom was close to fifty when he died, and he probably would've lived longer than that, so maybe it's possible. And I'm rambling on that point. I think you might want to add in a few more descriptions. Maybe it's just me, but Thrall's sixty now! He's got to be going grey, or something, at the very least. What's he look like? Or Jadece, for that matter, or...yeah, you get the point. o.O Rambling again.

One quick grammatical note, in this sentence: "Leo'karpo will find her and *teach* her something once he was done with that wanderer." I think that should be "would find her." Unless Leo's entirely, one hundred percent certain that he's going to find her in the future. Other than that, great stuff! I can't wait for the next update!

Hum... why do I feel that the crooks were up to a big surprise...? (By the way, I am a BOY)

To be frank, it is never a good idea to incorperate two stories into one, especially when the two stories are so remotely far from each other. It will be a better idea to "flashback" the past events in the story of the present, instead of jumping from one time to another.

Sorry for my delay as well. I did not go the ff.net for some time and did not know that you've updated your fic. Anyway, good chapter. Tevelai made a very deep impression in my head.

You know, I really sort of like Ardomael. He reminds me of a lot of teenage guys I know. Gets into an argument with his father, leaves home, gets *really* drunk, that sort of thing. And he's sarcastic, in a funny sort of way. Heehee. Thrall must be *so* proud. (Oh look, more sarcasm.)

Anyway.I liked the second chapter, too. I don't see how Aszune ties into Ardomael, but oh well. It was still an interesting chapter. (As far as I know, no, there is no official novel about Aszune.) By the way, I think it was most likely unintentional, but I loved the irony in the line "But Aszune's heart was not in this," taking into consideration what you have to do for her in the game. Heh. Nice work; I can't wait until the next update. I hope you get well soon!

Hum. it seems to me rather abrupt to see Aszune jumping out from nowhere. I wonder if she will have anything to do with Ardomael? Good chapter, anyway.

(Sorry that I posted my chapter before you looked at it. But I can't wait.)

Interesting start, this sounds good just like D.C.W. did, keep going!

Good good, I see you're writing again. OMG, does that guy have to be so stuck up?! Watch out for repetitives. Other than that, it's a fine piece of work!

Write more!

~Wonder

OOhh. what a personality!