omg plez continue

hey its good just keep going with it

This is really cool and since my Dad owns this site I'm going to tip him off on your good writing. And Ethan should ask Lizzie out.But at the same time during the week Miranda and Gordo come back and find Lizzie and Gordo dating and get really mad. What do you think? Email me soon at HowartsDiva@msn.com. (Don't ask about the name) lol

What will Ethan say? I want to know! Really good story line, but it is sort of hard to hide being popular. Maybe you should have made her become popular in the first 2 or 3 days. Like others said...more discripitive. Kate is way out of line, and u need to have more description. I can't picture it in my head, it is going way to fasy.

hey, its going great update soon!

i love it so far. hurry up and update. don't keep me waiting.

I don't want to sound like I'm picking your story apart, but you asked for reviews and whatever, so I'm going to tell you what I think. Sorry if it might be harsh, but maybe it will help you? =) |

[1] How can she hide popularity? Being popular is not something you can hide, especially from your best friends. Maybe she's hiding being a snob or someting, but there is no realistic way she can hide popularity.

[2] Kate is way out of character, and so is pretty much everyone in this story. First of all, if Lizzie was popular, she'd most likely be competing against Kate, since Kate hates her. And Kate would not hold back from telling Gordo or Miranda if Lizzie was hiding something from them.

[3] This story is moving a little too fast, and I could barely get through it because I had no idea what was going on. Being more descriptive and looking up facts (ie: ammonia is a cleaning liquid. Maybe you meant pneumonia) will help a lot.

| I'm sorry if I sound really snobby, I don't mean to, but you do have a good storyline, but it's just not descriptive or realistic enough for me. Good try though, and don't give up on writing. A little more experience will make you a fabulous writer. =)

Miranda has ammonia? I hate to be the barer of bad news, but ammonia is a cleaning fluid. I think what you mean is anemia. And Kate is seriously out of character. You have an intrestng plot line, but you need to be more descriptive. Good try, just owrk a little harder, and i know this can be good!