Reviews for Aliens From The Planet Cryptonion

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final-fantasy-20 2005-04-30 ch 1,	abuseI used to love this show as a kid. This story is really hard to read. You could make it better by having it spell checked, and using full stops, and spaces between the paragraphs. Well I hope you continue this story, but please consider my and the other reviewers suggestions. Good luck on your writing!!
Lex Lexa 2004-02-04 ch 1,	abuseThis is the crappest story I have ever read and probably ever will read. Goodbye.
Tora Aykanami 2004-01-22 ch 1,	abuseEEr...heheh...Guess I would just be reitterating the importance of grammer, spelling, and such. If yuo're interrested, you could e-mail me a chapter and I could edit it for you. Or you could get someone else to do it. Either way. The story line sounds good though, so please continue.
jojodm 2004-01-18 ch 1,	abusesorry but that was like one whole sentence.
iwillbiteoffatoe 2003-08-09 ch 1,	abuseI wrote similiar stories in 1st grade. Keep it up! I hope it's a parody. But, whether it IS a parody or it's NOT a parody, I actually feel that much dumber after reading it.
RoyRules23 2003-08-06 ch 1,	abuseIts very interesting. Please come read my story. Its under Games-Super Smash Brothers-Napped If you want to read it. I think its quit good. And reaview. My story should be on the first page. Thanx. loved your story.
Raine Ishida 2003-08-05 ch 1,	abuseHmm...I commend you for being the only Are You Afraid of the Dark? writer. You have 25 reviews and that's incredible. I don't have 25 reviews on anything! laughs I'll agree with a few things the other reviewers said, like paragraph and captitalizing appropriately, because the lack of that made it a bit hard to read, but I got the main concept. Either way, good job on your story and keep up the good work!
catgurl83 2003-08-04 ch 1,	abuseFirst let me say that no writer is perfect. Now, as most of the other reviewers have said, you need to work on paragraph breaks, spelling, grammer, and punctuation. I do have another peice of advice though; find a good beta reader. A beta can do wonders for a story. There are many who would be willing - just ask. Catgurl83
Dixie Darlin 2003-08-03 ch 1,	abuseIt's not that bad. You do however need to work on making the plot deeper and all. I've watched this show ever since its debut on Nick in 1991. I've thought about writing a fic on one of the guest stars, that Mr. Sardo guy. You know, the guy with the magic shop? Unfortunately, I'm busy with other stuff. Good luck on writing in the future. Mistress of Balmoral
Shadowkat11 2003-07-29 ch 1,	abuseI think that you are a very creative writer however there are too many and then's. I think that there should be more description of the adults like how they looked, what they were thinking, how they walked etc. Also you are telling me a lot but not showing me. If you want me to know that Dave is still a kid at herat show me an example of that. This is a good beginning. I wnat to read Chapter 2
C.Bell 2003-07-29 ch 1,	abuseWhile I'm glad a section for Are You Afraid of The Dark has been added I'm afraid to say your story is a big disappointment. I don't know how old you are, but your writing standard is very poor. The puncuation needs a lot of work. You need to learn about comma's and paragraph's, etc. The story also flows very badly and looks like it was written in about five minutes with little effort or care. I think you need to go and learn some basic English before trying to write again.
E M McCarty 2003-07-25 ch 1,	abuseI have one thing to say about this... It sucks. There is no spacing, no paragraph breaks, no quotation marks, and way too many run-on sentences. Have you ever heard of spellcheck and a beta reader? I couldn't write as bad even if I tried!
FandomAvenger 2003-07-25 ch 1,	abusePlease tell me this is a joke. Learn what paragraph breaks belong. Stop skipping English class and learn to use your spellcheck. You should also learn how to develop a plot.
crying-bloodx 2003-07-24 ch 1,	abuseHaha I used to watch this show all the time when I was like seven.
WolfBane2 2003-07-12 ch 1,	abuseOH MY GOD, I LOVE THIS SHOW! A couple of my favorites were The Tale Of The Mystery Soup, The Tale Of The Silver Sight (of course!), and I don't know the name of this one, but one where the girl is being haunted by a ghost wolf, and turns into a wolf herself. I love this show, I can't believe they cancelled it. Now they only show it the week before Halloween. I miss it, once again, I LOVE THIS SHOW!

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