Reviews for Together Forever

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Bandit-sama 2004-09-28 ch 1,	abuseDude...this story was okay. I didn't really like the sex secne but hey what can you do on anyway? But other then that it was a good story. The author's note though my scare a lot of people away. I can understand you not liking flames but hey worse things have happened. Like getting your account canceled. But other then that good job.
SilverConfusion 2004-09-20 ch 1,	abuseI know it shouldn't but the disclaimer made me laugh so hard (great story all the same)
Dark Embrace 2004-09-01 ch 1,	abusemy mom will kill me if she knows I'm saying this but... I loved this story. I think it's cute...in a way...
guy who reads fanfics 2004-04-05 ch 1,	abuseew!
Elf Asato 2004-03-12 ch 1,	abuseWow, you must have been burned badly before... Because I feel that you really have the potential to become a wonderful writer, I'll bother to give you a little constructive criticism. First off, you could do without being so hostile and defensive in your author's notes. That sort of thing might turn people off who might have normally read your story. Or they might just laugh and read it anyway, like I did. How to deal with flamers effectively, though, is another issue. Your actual content is cheesy and cliched. Why should I read your fic when I can read dozens more just like it? In this fandom, fics like yours are a dime a dozen. You also could use a spell checker. 'Noctorn' was the only noticeable misspelling since I don't exactly go through fics, checking each word for spelling. But you might want to comb through it again and check for others. Unless you're just a lazy **, like I am, who is, sadly, content to leave such imperfections. Aside from the cheesiness of them being "together forever", another point of interest is the fact that Link and Sheik apparently fall in love at first sight, granting them access to consumate their "relationship" in a badly written sex scene. I'm not sure if I'm the first to tell you or not, but love does not equate sex. Honestly, in my experience, couples who are all spoony and sexual with each other right off the bat do not stay "together forever." In fact, they break up after a few months (if that) once the novelty is over. Of course, this is all considering if you want to turn this into a well-written fic. If not, it might be something to take into consideration for the future.
Rydia Highwind 2004-03-12 ch 1,	abuseAh, always good to see some good Zelda yaoi. I agree with you that Sheik is his own person, but I do think your disclaimer was a little harsh, heh. ^^;
xiao_angel 2003-11-30 ch 1, anon.	abusei just want to tell you this SHEIK IS A GIRL!
BlackFireGoddess 2003-10-19 ch 1,	abuseGreat story ^_^
Lickmaflaminlamabitch 2003-09-22 ch 1, anon.	abuseO... I liked it. But sadly, I never really like the "LETS GET IT ON!" partz. Juss makes me feel all wrong, and unclean inside. However, I liked ur writing style very much. Epona: Yup, yup i liked this story too. And u kid juss proved my point. U juss can't be walking around in tights and a green skirt, and not be GAY! I'm not against Gay people though...but howm any times must i say this. HE IS GAY GAY GAY! AND FOR CRYING OUT LOUD MY NAMES JACK AND IM A GUY IM NOT A GURL IM A GUY! I KNOE! SHEESH!! Well we gotz more stories to review buddy. See ya around partner. Jack: PEACE OUT CUB SCOUT!
Link4eva 2003-08-28 ch 1, anon.	abuseYou wrote a great story! I would really like to hear anothe one about Sheik and Link from you ^_^
evilficus 2003-07-03 ch 1,	abusegood/
Yami Ayumi 2003-07-02 ch 1,	abuseHiya. I really like your story. You are quite talented. ^__^ Actually, I have read this story many times, but I just reviewed now. I wish you luck in any upcoming stories you may be writting.
FaerieFreak 2003-06-15 ch 1,	abuseI liked it a lot. You are a good writer for these types of things. I still cannot believe that Sheik is Zelda either... it's a lie, I tell you! Anyway, geat job, and lemony bits don't ever hurt a story, I don't know why anyone complains. There IS always a warning! Thank you.
rxcspideyb 2003-05-29 ch 1,	abuseYES!! awsome and i totally agree with you sheik is his own person i think that after th whole thing in lake hylia zelda saw that sheik was in love with link and was disgusted by this afterwards sending sheik away and takeing his place DAMN ZELDA! >:) soo anyway GREAT FIC! keep up the good work ;)
Ana Callista 2003-05-26 ch 1,	abusewow.. did you really get flamed that bad from writing this? you made it sound like people were condemning you to hell or something... L maybe they were. I liked the story, though i have to admit the dialogue was a bit childish... probably just a style i'm not used to. Otherwise, its cute as hell, and poo on those who can't use constructive criticism (i totally agree, if people can't get past one little continuity problem bout Sheiks gender, than they shouldn't read it) wow... this is a big review.. sorry i'll stop now Good Job!

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