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moonmouse 2007-03-12 ch 1,	abusecries Beautiful!
thefictionalfreak 2006-02-23 ch 1,	abuseaw i really liked this! Ive always wanted to know/read about her pregnancy and stuff, like her thoughts and all that. you did it really well. i love it.
Laila 2005-03-10 ch 1, anon.	abuseThis is just so Brilliant. It's BETTER than that, it's wonderful! Seriously, this is the single best fanfiction in any genre I have ever read. I'm not kidding, it's beautiful.
Erin Kaye Hashet 2004-12-04 ch 1,	abuseSo beautiful. I don't know why there aren't more stories like this, about Lorelai when she was pregnant. Write more, please, and I hope you write more than just fanfic!
Katie 2004-10-01 ch 1, anon.	abuseLoved it! Rarely if ever do I find such quality in Young!Lorelai that I did here. I'd really apreciate it if you could write some more of her teenage years, before or after Rory. Again, really a piece of art!
Lynn 2004-09-20 ch 1, anon.	abuseThat was just... amazing. I mean that was one of the most beautiful pieces of litterature I've ever read. It's like you got into her head or something. I'd really like it if you'd write another story of Lorelai as a teenager, pregnant or not. Or maybe of her childhood. Oh well, I really liked it.
Leni 2004-07-25 ch 1, anon.	abuseWow. That's... new. Sorta refreshing pov, Lorelai can't have been a very happy pregnant teenager, love that someone captured that so well.
hmcfanaddict 2004-07-08 ch 1,	abuselike this story. i have always wondered about what people said about lorelai when she got pregnant.
waterlilies'n moonlight 2004-06-10 ch 1,	abuseI really enjoyed reading this! This is what I'd call an honest story, if you know what I mean.
Haefen 2003-06-07 ch 1,	abuseI really liked this piece. I think it's the first of it's kind I've read, where Lorelai isn't all wee-golly-jolly I'm having a baby, and I'm doing it on my own! or melodramatically unhappy. Lots of strong lines, I especially liked: "Lorelai lives her life in a series of steps. It is twelve steps from her bed to the bathroom. She knows that one by heart, having to rely on it often as she forces herself to roll off the mattress and bolt for the toilet. Puking has subsided, and now it's only her bladder that tortures her. And her heart. Yes, her heart pains her often." Because it's real and it's pain without crossing the line between fiction and a poor excuse for angst. Good job :)
sleepless-dreams 2003-05-10 ch 1,	abuseIt's so GOOD! I love it. It's an original concept, and incredibly well-written, and just... wonderful. I love the way you repeat certain themes throughout this-- the nail polish, the steps... I occasionally tend to judge fanfictions by how they would work on their own-- how they would appeal, for instance, to someone who isn't necessarily a fan of Gilmore Girls-- and this would definitely work as a story on its own, which just shows that you've managed to develop a full, real character that we don't have to fill with things that we ourselves know from the show. Which is great. I like to highlight things that I particularly liked about a story, short lines that I think were incredibly well-written, but as I was going through the story a second time, I realized that MOST of the lines are my favorites and I can't pick just a few. I love that we see that she doesn't necessarily want Rory, that she's hurt by the comments people make about her, the "She's a PRETTY girl" line, the fact that she likes her popcorn with a side of pickles-- just the way she lives her life, week by week, and we see it so clearly... EVERYTHING. It's really, really good. I can't wait to see more of your writing. Maybe more short ones like this that leave me wanting more but also make me glad that it's so short because it's really the way it's supposed to be-- this story stands perfectly on its own. Again, wow. Keep writing!
Green Eve 2003-03-26 ch 1,	abuseTough little story. Moving. I always find this part of the GG history hard to imagine, Lorelai running away with her tiny baby. The episode "Rory's Arrival" didn't do much to clear it up, IMO. I really liked these lines: 'In times like those, Lorelai smoothes her palm over her belly, whispering secretly inside her own mouth. "You and me, kid. It's just you and me and everything's gonna be perfectly fine. I promise."' Good work, thanks for writing it.
ophelia 2003-03-07 ch 1, anon.	abusefinally something new AND good for a change. well done. i like the nail polish part. :)
kimlockt 2003-03-05 ch 1, anon.	abuseThis is VERY well written. Nice job blending the hope, fear, pain, and stress that Lorelai must have been feeling. The thing that strikes me most about this fic is how completely alone Lorelai seems to be with no one in her corner. Man, but did she ever need a Lane.
Dot 2003-03-05 ch 1, anon.	abuseThis was such a great story. It was really touching and I liked that it was something different. I really like how well you portrayed Lorelai's feelings, they seem very realistic. You have a lot of writing talent.

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