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| a kiss may be grand 2003-06-05 ch 1,  | abuseThat's not the end, right? There's more, right? Please let there be more. Heh. This story is very very good. |
| studentnumber24601 2003-03-08 ch 1, | abuse::dies from the cute:: This is fabulous. Shimmerwings should have birthdays more often. Thanks for putting up your own adorable slashy story. :) |
| Angel of Harmony 2003-03-07 ch 1, | abuseAdorable. I read this when you posted it to the newsboyxnewsboy list, but I never got around to reviewing it. So, I shall now. This story is really great, and incredibly cute. I loved your characterization of David, and the whole hand-warming thing= major aw! Please, write more. |
| kymaera 2003-03-05 ch 1, anon. | abuseYou rock, Skywise! (I am amused you are still using the name. didn't your favorite character change to Chot near the end? ::grins:: ) I like this fic, although you're right, it is a bit cliche. Don't worry though, as you keep writing, you'll get out of that. That's the nice thing about writing (and most things), if you do them frequently, you get better. I don't think you overused your commas at all, and although some of your wording is a little odd, it doesn't detract from the overall effect of the fic. Great job. |
| Sparker 2003-03-04 ch 1, | abusethis was really cute!! jack sounds like such a moosh! gotta love it. you should add more, u know.make it a longer fic.not just a ficlet. its really good! by the way, i LOVE the description of davey! hes one of my faves! love, sparker |
| Shimmerwings 2003-03-04 ch 1, | abuseI need to have a birthday more often if it'll increase the level of Jack/David this much, lol. Something Jack/David that I didn't write . . . it's a beautiful thing. Very cute, especially the first hand-warming scene. I love how David is all Les-like when he's rambling on. It's . . . cute, for lack of a better word. Whoah, and I seriously doubt either of the boys will ever be able to have an innocent cup of hot chocolate again, after all the stories I've read (or written, lol) with them flirting/kissing over a cup. Not that this is a bad thing . . . Well, I loved it. Thank you for the lovely ficlet! |