 Dudly 2009-02-28 . chapter 7Okay, some quotage is in order, because I have to mentions the bits I really liked--
Before they left for Caritas, Spike had even given a little pep talk. The motivational speech basically amounted to “Screw star-crossed lovers,” but the tequila shots they had done proved very “peppy.” Well, as Spike said, there’s no shame in liquid courage.
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Angel’s eyes nearly popped out of his head as Cordelia and Spike both flashed smiles, inclined their heads toward each other and said “We know” at exactly the same time. The duo’s obvious affinity for each other was more than mildly disturbing. It went against the natural order of things. Angel recovered from that shock and looked up to find Cordelia staring at him, expectantly.
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Spike noticed that Angel’s “nice” really wasn’t flying with Cordy, so he decided to create a little distraction. “What about me, ya big poof,” Spike asked, doing a clumsy pirouette of his own. Angel glared at him but it brought a smile back to Cordelia’s face. “Well then, I think drinks are called for. Cosmopolitan for milady?” Spike asked.
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Angel didn’t know about that. He didn’t want Cordy and Spike coming together in any way, shape, or form. Plus, they weren’t really opposites. They both had a lot in common, with their tendencies to be loud and nosy and tactless. If Cordy was looking for her opposite, well, Angel was a much better candidate. She liked to watch TV while he liked to read. She drank Diet Coke while he drank blood. See, opposites.
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Quotage done.
So, see. In my modest opinion, it seems like the characters are a bit forced, bent out of canon-characterization to fit the plot. So Buffy was always big with the drama, but your Buffy is soaking in it in way canon Buffy doesn't. Angel is a bit too clueless for my tastes.
Cordelia and Spike bond way too quickly. Now, I'm 100% convinced they would make a nice pair (buggered if the quotations from above didn't prove how my favorite thing was Spike/Cordelia snark) but I don't think Cordy would trust him just this soon, y'know? (References for such blaspheme: The fact he tortured Angel in AtS1, and her reaction to him being good in You're Welcome. Although her first reflex on seeing him was snark about his hair dye. =D)
The last quotation I added because it was such dork!Angel. Like his speech with opposites, right before Darla showed up pregnant. *beams* The one in which Cordelia goes all "Are you trying to say you love me?"
I lost my train of thought. I think as a whole, I like this story. Just the fact that some parts seem forced kinda bug me, but it's entirely forgivable. Good work. |
 lia-finn 2003-04-21 . chapter 17I loved this! I loved this! I LOVED THIS! What a wonderful story. You got the characters right, and it was funny and serious and SO good, and I loved Cordy taking care of Connor like he was her own son. I loved Buffy and Spike (he´s great!) You are amazing writer, and you are writing a sequel, right? RIGHT? Soon! You must!
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