Just when it started to get interesting you cut it off? It should be much longer where Telemane reluctantly decides to take on Zeminar as an apprentice, Telemane learns Magician secrets, one of the girls falls in love with Zeminar, he becomes a world famous magician, and the dragons decide not to eat him. Please? Oh, by the way, make Telemanes' speech more like a Physics proffessor and less like a jolly good english man's.

OH! That is so awsome! u are so good! Oh please make a sequel,please!OH and if u do,make the fight scene more detailed!! that was so awsome! Make one,Please!

P.S.if i ever figure out how to post a story,please read mine.

Oh i get it now.morewen and tlemain had a kid....an shaana is daystars daughter...right i get it..good very gdod

Its very good excpet i am a bit confused.from this i can assum that "rine" is the grandauhter of the original Cimorene as in the original EFC. BUt i m a bit confused about how teleman s her father..who shaana is.If i am correct..mandenbar and cimorene hd Daysar..who married the fre witch Shiara. Then came Rine? if so then how is telmain her father as stated in the beginning?

awesome! read the story! read the story!

it was ok but i'm pretty sure that telemain wasn't cimorenes father....

I really liked your story.

Good. Very well written.

Longer! Please! Otherwise its very very good.

It's a lot cooler if you have a longer part. I don't care if it takes forever, but it's more satisfying if its longer.

Hurry! Next part!

I *like*... More! More! (And if it gets to be too long, you could repost a few parts as one story.)

You're right! Some things never change!:)

that was a really sweet ending.

Pretty good! A little cinfused at first but after another sentence figured it out. Great job!