I have. And it is. And they are.

Please tell me how she isn't a marysue. I mean, even in the first chapter. "she is very strong and is able to do Class-A missions." And how Sasuke was "smitten" with her. Do I need to say more? I will say that some of the writing is interesting, but it still lacks.

Eikuu Hyo, you're telling me the fics with the original characters from the anime or manga is a marysue? What? ...I won't ask.

For one thing, I really don't understand why people are going on and on about saying how your story is a "marysue." I've written Japanese and English fanfics, but if this is considered a "marysue," then about 99% (Japanese and English) of all fanfics out there would be in that realm.
Yes, this story had punctuation errors that made it hard to read, but the story and the main character is made in depth, adding more to the original story that is made by the actual Japanese manga artist.
Who cares if the story and characters are destroyed in a fanfic? Just don't read it if it disturbed you that much! Don't spoil if for the other people that enjoy reading these fanfics!

Lastly to the author: I really enjoyed the character in your fanfic. I look forward in reading the next chapter you put up.

Read the whole thing before you review it and say it's a marysue. Cause frankly they're called fanfics b/c you can do whatever you want with them. And if you call orig chara's marysue's then I guess all the Japanese Fanfics (novels in as they call it) I've read for Naruto, TeniPuri, GGX FF that all have orig chara's like to self indulge with 2D chara's. I'll be sure to pass that on to them hun.

Speech, my dear, it's spelled speech. And yes, it's fanfiction, but if the characters aren't acting like the characters, then WHY BOTHER? At least I'm not writing marysues to indulge in fantasies with 2D characters.

"If this was a mary-sue" ...if? Do you not listen? This IS a marysue story. Jesus christ. Put your potential to something more worthwhile.

Bwaha... Orochimaru ansd Kabuto scare the crap outta me!! ;=^_\ Wah!! I wanna go hide in a corner whenever I see his face!! CREEPY! Good chapter though!

uber is a nice word -! haha. oh orochimaru he's nice to kureia is he? aw so swet!! ^_^ hehe -! kureia's so sweet to naruto!! and haku-kun!! ^_^ love it continue hurry!

BUM BUM BUM! Nice ficcie! Keep going, I'm uber interested! **likes the word uber** Uber uber uber!!

Speak what you will that's what free speach is for. Although I'm beginning to wonder what the words 'FAN FIC' means to most of you. If you don't like it fine, if you don't like OOC fine, but don't get your hopes up over 2D chara's that are not real. I mean it's all fake and called a FAN FIC for a reason, don't get so defensive about chara's that are not real. If this was a mary-sue I'd really have to get my head examined over the fact that these are not real people.

I've seen worse, at least. But you need to keep your grammar and punctuation in check, please. Also, you say "Don't assume it's a Marysue" but I don't have to ASSUME squat. I read all you wrote here, and your girl Natsumi Kureia is a MARYSUE. Don't try and deny it. Please. It's just pathetic. I am a yaoi fan, but I am also a non-yaoi fan. I am not "someone who doesn't like non-yaoi" but I just don't SEE how Haku could possibly be having a relationship with this girl. He is completely devoted to Zabuza, and whether you feel that loyalty stems from admiration, friendship, or romantic love, it doesn't matter. There's no room left for Haku to have a girlfriend, especially one kept secret from Zabuza.
I have to thank you for keeping the characters somewhat in character, besides for the fact that Sasuke does NOT become smitten with a girl at first sight. It could be worse, though not by much.
Major flaw here: Sakura did NOT pass the chuunin exam, sorry. Saying she did sounds idiotic. The nine tails has never taken over Naruto's body, he's always been in control. The several times where he used it's power, he uses it for his own purpose, and with his own intention behind the blows. Of course the Kyubi WANTS to break free, but so far has proved quite unable to.
"Honestly I got so annoyed Sakura and some characters in the story that I HAD to add my own character."
I'm afraid this little line ticked me off a little too much not to mention it. You don't HAVE to do anything, hon. Personally I like all the characters in Naruto, every last one. Sakura seems to have been misunderstood by you at the least, I don't think you've exposed yourself to quite enough of the story yet.
One last note: what IS OCC? I've heard of OOC, but not OCC...and that's not meant to be mocking, I really want to know if that means anything, or if it's just a typo.

I think I'm going to go over there and puke. Don't ASSUME it's a marysue? It IS a marysue. The grammar, oh, the grammar. Run-ons and lack of commas and such and such. And...she has sharingan. No. Please, no.

Please go read up on Mary Sues. And, for that matter, on proper grammar. This isn't a very good story.

XD That was great! I really like that new character and how you came up with that jutsu!! Though Sasuke is a bit out of character (and it's not sasusaku =(.) It's a great fic! Keep going!