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EternalDamnation21
2005-10-27
ch 6,
abuse*sniff* sorry about your mouse! I like your story and this chapter made me happy...eep!*snuggles Zim plushie she forgot was wrapped up in covers because he was i trouble and sitting in her lap*
Toshihiko1
2004-07-14
ch 13,
abuseI have mixed feelings about this fic. I'm not a big romance fan (especially when the involved characters aren't both original)...and I might be bias because I like Red better than Purple. :D

To answer your questions...Yes, ZaiFae is a Mary-Sue. She surpasses all her fellow students in her studies, is lusted after by the leaders of Irk, has a relationship with Purple, (who I'm assuming is your favourite character?) defeats Red in battle (his strong-suit), and threatens to outgrow the pair. She's the same gender as you...gracious, her name is your username!

You've already got the sequal up. And I'm going to read it. >>

Your writing's fine. It's clear and I could follow it without having to reread anything: Although it took me until the sixth chapter to confirm that ZaiFae was female. ...Just keep writing. You'll work out the lumps on your own.
ChibiHeartDragon
2003-05-22
ch 13,
abuseImpressive story, job well done! Uh, I would really like to see a sequel to this. It's a very nice story. If I can get to updating more I would make a story of this kind of my own. Of course, I need to do other things. So yeah,...good story!
ChibiHeartDragon
invader blue
2003-05-01
ch 13, anon.
abusegreat story! its like.. wow! i couldn't stop reading it!! makes me wanna go write lol.. although my stories will probably never be half as good as yours!! i loved it so much! and btw i'd love to see a sequel!! and your story was wicked original too lol. it was awesome!!
IcePrincess777
2003-04-26
ch 13,
abuseI don't think ZaiFae is a Mary Sue, though I do see how she could be considered one. It would be realy neat if there was a sequel and your writing style is fine the way it is! Cool story, by the way. ^__^
DibsLyn
2003-04-26
ch 13,
abuseYes, I admit that I've been reading this story for a couple of days and have been neglecting to review. Bad me! Well hey, here's one now. I don't think that there's anything you should change about your writing style. We all have our own, and that's what makes us unique. If we all sounded the same reading...as well as writing...would be awfully boring, don't you think? And for Mary Sues, who cares whether or not this was or was not? It was a good story. That's all that matters. I'd like to see you write more. I've sure written a lot of things that could be considered Mary Sue. Mary Sues are an expression of longing, I think, and there's nothing wrong with dreaming. We couldn't live without it. It's all a matter of taste. If you're getting something from the whole experience, it's worth it. I'd like to talk to you someday about MPD, should you be willing...I have it too. Fun, eh? Well, what else to say, really? This review has probably creeped you out. Oh well. Great story!! I loved the ending. What a twist. (insert witty closing remark here)

~Lyn
Bulba1
2003-04-26
ch 13,
abuseI'd love to see a sequel and I don't think you should change your writing style. What exactly is a Mary Sue?
Takker
2003-04-26
ch 13, anon.
abusei loved this story and am sad to see it go. as for the poll, some may consider her a mary sue, but now a days, its IMPOSSIBLE to make a character that isnt one so i dont blame you. i have a mary sue character ^^' tallest Purple's daughter. oh well, it doesnt matter. i love any story with the tallests in it.

now for a sequel. YES! make one. the ending was incredibly unique and a wonderful twist to the actual tv show. keep writing! ^^
MetaChi
2003-04-26
ch 13,
abuseWow...just wow. And that explains the "Planet?" sticky note.

YES! WRITE A SEQUEL!

No, I've been looking around to find out exactly what a Mary Sue is because I kept getting different answers, and I don't think this is a Mary Sue. It's more a fancharacter fic, but not quite self-insertion (cause ZaiFae's an Irken an' all). Anyway, far as I know, Mary Sues are perfect, everyone likes 'em, they seem innocent, etc, etc. I even found this site about Mary Sues, and it was called The Mary Sue Society or something like that. Weird.

Feh...dumb concept. Heh. Better than Red! Yeah!

Yea...cake is good.

Yep, that blob monster. Stupid Nickelodeon for not showing some eppies! STUPID! Well, at least there're websites that get the transcripts from these eppies...
SaphireMMTPX
2003-04-26
ch 13,
abuseMore! Sequel! Well, that explains why there was that stickie note to where Red sent Zim.
SaphireMMTPX
2003-04-24
ch 12,
abuseAw! Your mean to make it end like this! But, yes, give the Saphire that chapter! And omg! You put my name in this chapter! *feels so giddy and happy, then get's smacked by her co writer* Ow...
Sakura
2003-04-22
ch 12, anon.
abuseErm...I meant, before Spork was Tallest. Not what that line may have implied...I'm just correcting that, now I'm gone. Bye! (runs)
MetaChi
2003-04-21
ch 12,
abuse(presents ZaiFae a green cake with a picture of Purple on it) Here ya go!

This is...wow. Just wow.

(stares) What's being a girl got to do with being Tallest? Hmm? Tallest Miyuki was a girl, before Spork was...which was before Red & Purple...which was like 100 years in the past...probably. 'Cause Zim was alive and killed 'em both with his blob monster...Okay, I'll stop rambling. See ya!

Update soon!
SaphireMMTPX
2003-04-20
ch 11,
abuseOro..? I'm confused..If everything will be ok, then what will red do to her when he awakens? o.O Dun dun dun! *drum rolls*
Kylee M. Fowler
2003-04-18
ch 11,
abuseI can't beleive she shot Red! No! Oh well, post more! It's a great story!
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