The emotion in Harry is very true to life., Although, as a critique... It sounds a bit overdramatic to mention all of the act Sirius didn't do without taking into account the sacrafices Sirius made, and whether or not Sirius was even allowed to be near Harry.

And isn't it a bit sudden to mention their relationship since he's been keeping secret for so long?

besides that I love the pace this is clipping at. you've got my interest.

update soon please...

kudos on a great chapter

The way Hermione reacts with Harry is fluid and sisterly. Despite what she's suffered she worries about Harry and takes times to notice how he and Severus act.

This shows that you know your characters and are able to get inside their heads.

kudos on a great chapter.

This was smoothly written.

Harry pregnant? This is an interesting story. I especially enjoy the way you frame Harry' s emotions. You capture him and Severus well.


kudos on a great first chapter.

please continue, or if you simply began posting it elsewhere, tell me where. i love it and you would have to be truely evil to quit three chapters in- especially with that cliffhanger ending. keep writing reguardless

I love these you so have to write more please they are just to good to leave here.

This needs to continue. Please do so *grins innocently* I have to know what happens next!

um...yea...you kno it is very nice of you to leave off the story there and not update in a year! it was getting good too...=( UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE

hey- are you ever going to update this? it has such great promise.. i hope you continue!

Whoa, whoa! It's so good I can't wait for more! Poor sweet Harry, sick and miserable - I just love seeing him like this. But Severus captured - that's really a superb plot-twist! Such a promise of lovely, lovely angst - please write more!

WOW! you have got to continue this story. NOW!!
PLEASE!! PRETTY PLEASE!

this looks like a great story, just so long as nobody dies. Update soon!

More! More! Will Severus be saved? Will there be a shock with everybody else? Hehehe. So, will Harry give birth to a healthy baby? Will there be a wedding? Will Severus come back? Please! Looks with sad puppy dog eyes.

Ops methinks that Harry dropped a bomeshell or is it a baby boomer?


I like write more soon

AAh ha ha!! GO Harry! Excellent chapter. I won't complaine about the chapter lenth since you update so frequently. ;) *puts haddock away for another review*

ack!! you can't stop it there! Well I guess you could since I've yet to read chapter three that is up, but if three is a cliffe I'm going to huck a haddock in your gereral direction. ;)