Safe to say I got the shivers reading that! Like another reviewer said, it was nice to see what goes on in the mind of a non-central character. The very last line seemed a bit cliche, but it worked fine with your piece. I say this only as constructive criticism, because overall I liked your style and tone and the haunting question of what reality is the true reality. Nice work!

You reviewed my matrix story, so I just thought I'd review your Harry Potter story. I really like this little short, but I thought you could make it even better by, oh, say making when Lavender wakes up it's her turn in truth or dare, and all of the girls look at eachother trying not to giggle. Her dare is to spend the night in the forbidden room in the North coridor or something, and end it right there, so the reader knows what that room is. You set me up for something like that, but you just ended it in "Or was it?", and that seemed kinda weak. I loved your description, it was very proffesional, and I loved the way you portraid everyone in the room, but you set me up for something exciting, and you ended it. Don't take any of this personally, there just suggestions I give as a writter. Good luck writting in the future, you have a great amount of tallent.

Demitri

ooh creepy!

FREAKY! I love freaky. *Presses print*

Ooooooooooh, freaky freaky freky.

I'm glad to see a fic that isn't centred on one of the main characters. It's also nice to see Lavender acting like an intelligent person.

Definitely interesting.

hmmmmmmm...very disturbing, yet interesting and creative...

That was Different and verry good.

Good! I just had to read this again!

ooooooooohhhhhhhh freaky!

OMG! I LOVED it! PLEEEEEEEZ WRITE MORE! )

*Moon Beam*

That was very odd. Something of a "Newhart" ending-you know, waking up and it's all an extremely vivid dream, which I generally think is a cop-out, but you did okay.

Coolies! I liked it a lot. Great for a first fic.

that would suck if I was in that room. With no computer? THE HORROR!