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| Clownfood 2007-10-23 ch 1,  | abuseBrilliant and well-written! You really captured Snapes essance! |
| fireblazie 2007-08-17 ch 1, | abuseOh, but I *love* a good Snape fic. He's such an awesome character, so much depth, so much potential. You wrote him really, really, REALLY well. |
| Malfoy's Kitten 2007-07-05 ch 1, | abuselove it |
| knarly 2006-10-12 ch 1, | abuseExcellent work! The insight into Snape was the best part, I think, the examination of where his bitterness comes from. It's often irrational, but deeply felt. He loathes anyone who sees a crack in his mask of impassivity, or who has the kind of love he longs for but would never admit to wanting (even to himself). I enjoyed it immensely! |
| Hot Ice2 2006-05-16 ch 1, | abuseI love this story... I've never read another take on this circumstance before but I think you've done a marvelous job. |
| MidnightzStorm 2006-02-27 ch 1, | abuseThis is freaking amazing! Wonderful job, I kept going aw at all the baby parts. |
| Miz Turwaithiel 2005-09-10 ch 1, | abuse>:C Stop making characters have depth!! It makes me feel like a very, very shallow puddle. |
| Pickledishkiller 2005-08-13 ch 1, | abuseGo Severus. |
| Mressi 2005-07-03 ch 1, | abuseWow. I really don't know what to say. This is a powerful look at Snape's character, and at James's. Wonderful. |
| Larilee 2005-05-01 ch 1, | abuseThis is an excellent story giving one of the best reasons I've heard yet for Snape leaving the Death Eaters. Wonderful use of language and canon characters! |
| ProfessorSpork 2005-01-26 ch 1, | abuseWow. That was a lot... that was... wow. Well done. |
| duj 2005-01-24 ch 1, | abuseGreat version of Snape's turning. "I've always been invisible to them..." Perfect. Do you think he ever regretted saving the twins (in moments of sour moodiness) when he saw what pranksters they grew up to be? |
| Anica106 2005-01-05 ch 1, | abuseNice! This was an original idea, and very well pulled-off. I like both your dialogue and your narration stlye; it all set the mood very well. Good work! |
| Shavaineth 2004-11-24 ch 1, | abuseI really liked this version of how Snape came back to the Light. And hurrah for letting James smack Wormtail. It's a mild penance for Peter's betrayal but it's nice to see James get a little revenge for what will come, even if nobody but the reader realizes it. |
| Eodrakken 2004-09-07 ch 1, anon. | abuseThough this is by no means bad, I would say your writing has improved a lot since it was written. I took a minute to compare this fic to the most recently posted chapter of 'Shifts' (which I haven't been following, since I don't read WIPs, but just to compare the style), and found that your current work is much better at generating real emotion and tension in the characters' interactions. Recently you mentioned that you like to adhere as closely as possible to canon in your fic, and I think that's a fair assessment of your work in general, and this fic in particular. Barring OotP-related details of fact and characterization, I think this is basically what JKR has in mind for what happened with Snape, and that does you credit. But of course, you and I are striving for different things in our work. I'm not one to throw canon to the wind either, but this is a bit *too* close to canon to really grab me. That's a subjective take, of course. On another note, you've got some capitalization errors in this fic... notably "Muggles", "Ministry", "Avada Kedavra", and some other terms that are capitalized in the books. But you probably realize that now. :) Anyway, thanks for sharing this, and inviting me to give my opinion. |