I like it! Perhaps it should be called "The GREAT Beginning!"

what the hell is going on here? i guess this anya and obi-wan are lovers(?)...friends(?). and judging by your bio, anya is some version of yourself, which, by the way, rarely makes a good read, and i don't think i need to say that this is not an exception. and where is anakin? shouldn't he figure into this a little more, or is this story only an excuse to insert yourself into a fantasy?

also, you have too much dialogue...a little more description would be nice, and would help make your characters less obscure and wooden

Wheres Anakin in all this?

Oh, I just love this one! I can't specify what's so good about it, 'cause I think it's the whole...

your a TREKKIE! A TREKKIE! i did read your story and liked it. i read your bio, and was digusted. A TREKKIE! i wouldn't let that out and continue to write starwars stuff. i hate to break it to you, but we starwars followers don't take to kindly to you...you...trekkies.*wringles her nose in disgust at the use of the word*. you write well, and have good ideas, but i wouldn't let that trekkie thing get out. it's your opinion, your choice. i, myself, being a true blue starwars fanatic, do not appreciate startrek as some might. okay, i think it's down right evil. it IS the darkside. i memorized every starwars movie! have you memorized them? i can give you a list of other starwars people like myself that have. i won't though. jedi and trekkies don't match. you can't be both. it's like being yoda and darth maul at the same time. it just isn't right.

Just stopping by. Hoping everyone is enjoying this. May the Force be With You.

This author definitely needs to write more stories. This could be used for a future movie.

Good story! *in breaks Jynxa* You spelled my name wrong and I am evil not nice lke this. It isn't completely horrible though. I do not- *cut off as original personality comes back* Sorry- Jynxa is a little nasty but this was a good story. Keep writing!

Good story. Like to see some more storys with Anya. :)