Zell, Selphie and Quistis... dead? How horrifying. A truly touching fanfiction. Good work.

Zelphie-ness! Booyaka! More Zelphie-ness is needed hehe. It was good but too short! I knew It was Selphie when you said 'her babyish laugh' maybe I've just read too many Zelphies though XDD more! hehe you should write more zelphie because they're the best couple and this story was really sweet and I'm babbling on so imma stop...now.

aww... This is really very sweet, if touchingly sad. I would just say that you don't need to have the line 'it materialised into the ghost of zell' and floated off, etc. It's just a little bit, well, unsubtle. We'd figured out/hoped it was a spirit anyway, and I found it kinda spoiled the atmosphere - a bit of sustained mystery would have been nice. Still, I loved the twist at the end - Selphie too? *sniffle* Great work. Now let's have something longer. ^_^

AWE! that was so sad and cute and awe! i loved it!

... Oh, God. That was so sad. ;-; It was very nice, a little bit rushed but REALLY great. I wasn't expecting his love to be Selphie Tilmitt until I saw the initials... ;-;

"He was dead."
"He was pronounced dead a couple hours later."

That's the only slight glitch in the story. But other than that, AWESOME.